Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the graph depicts about population over the time for four asian countries living in city ,with prediction.
Overall the Malasyan people were higher than other three Phillippiness,Thailand and Indonesia. Thai population were lower than other.
In starting time Philipiness and Malesian crowd started were with equal number and some flacuation till 1990,but in remain time malasysian habbitants were surged with high rate of 75 percentage till 2020 and prediction for remain time also comparitivly high nearly80 percentage .In contrast the Philippiness diclined at 45 percentage till 2010 and after that time marginaly up with47 and52 percentage eith predictionfor 2030 and 2040 resprctivly
In 1970 thai people were nearly less 20 percentage and indonesian with 13 percentage increased marginaly till 2000 and indonesian people over took to thai population.Indonessian population fastly increased till 60 percentage eith pediction in 2040 and thai people marginaly up till 50 percentage
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response partially addresses the task by attempting to report the main features and trends of the four countries from 1970 to 2040. However, the information presented is sometimes inaccurate or poorly summarized, such as stating that 'Thai population were lower than other' without nuance or misreading some specific percentages. Furthermore, the length requirement of 150 words is not met, as the text is slightly short of the minimum. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to ensure all data points are read correctly from the graph, select key comparisons more effectively, and fully meet the word count requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is some basic organization with an introduction and separate body paragraphs for different countries, but there is no clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, as seen in phrases like 'In starting time' and 'for remain time'. Paragraphing is attempted, but referencing between sentences is often unclear, making the flow disjointed. To achieve a higher score, the writer should use a wider variety of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure logical sequencing of ideas throughout the report.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task. There are frequent spelling mistakes and word-form errors, such as 'Malasyan', 'Phillippiness', 'flacuation', 'habbitants', and 'diclined'. The range of vocabulary is restricted, and attempts at less common lexical items often result in noticeable errors that cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer must focus on correct spelling, expand their range of descriptive vocabulary for trends and statistics, and learn standard collocations for academic data reporting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The grammatical structures used are very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex ones. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'depicts about population over the time', 'population started were with equal number', and 'eith pediction'. Punctuation and word forms within grammatical patterns also show frequent inaccuracies that impede smooth reading. To progress, the writer needs to practice complex sentence structures, maintain consistent past and future tenses, and improve basic sentence construction.
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