Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The upper gragh shows the percentage of population living in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with prediction for 2030 and 2040.
Overall all the countries experienced a huge rise with their population, although at different rates.
By 1970 about 30 percent in Malaysia and 31 percent people in Philippines,lives in different cities.In contrast only 11 percent people in Indonesia and 19 percent people in Thailand,live in different cities.
By 1990 population in Philippines cross over the population live in Maylesia. Where there is only 45 percent population live in Malaysia and 50 percent population live in Philippines.
In 2040, the Line graph shows the maximum rise in population in Malaysia which is upto 90 percent, while the minimum population observe in Thailand which is which is about 50 percent .
While in contrast Philippines going to be rich in population in 2040 than Indonesia.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response is under the minimum word count of 150 words, coming in at 137 words (excluding 12 words copied from the prompt). The response attempts to address the task by giving an overview and mentioning some data points from the chart, but it only partially covers the information. The summary of trends is limited, and some of the data reported does not accurately reflect the visual data, such as the statement about 1990 figures or the prediction for 2040. To improve, the student must meet the word count requirement, provide a clearer overview of the main trends across the entire time period, and select accurate data to support comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response attempts some organisation with a loose overall structure, but lacks a clear logical progression throughout. Paragraphing is rudimentary and sentences often stand alone rather than flowing logically into one another. Cohesive devices are basic, repetitive, and occasionally inaccurate, such as 'While in contrast'. Reference words are sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to group related information more logically, use a wider and more accurate range of cohesive devices, and structure the text into clear, cohesive paragraphs.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors ('gragh') and inappropriate word choices (such as 'rich in population'). The range is minimally adequate for the task, but frequent inaccuracies in word choice and word form mean the vocabulary strains the reader at times. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary related to data trends ('maximum rise'), but these are not used with sufficient precision or control. To enhance the lexical resource, the writer should incorporate a wider variety of precise vocabulary for describing trends and avoid direct repetition of basic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response shows a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors in complex structures. There are persistent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions, such as 'about 30 percent in Malaysia... lives in different cities' and 'population in Philippines cross over'. Punctuation is also weak in places. These frequent errors distract the reader and occasionally obscure the meaning. To achieve a higher band, the writer must demonstrate greater control over basic grammar rules, improve sentence variety, and reduce the frequency of errors in verb forms and agreement.
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