Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates the information regarding the information of population in four Asisn countries living in cities from 1970, with the projection to 2040. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
Overall, it is clear that the percdentage of the population increased in all four cities. Malayisa showed the most significant growth, while Thailand has the smallest enrolment throughout the time period.
To strat with, in 1970, the Philippines and Malaysia started with a simlar population from 30%. Thailand and indonesia figure between 10 to 20 in 1970. Then rapid increase in Malaysia and Philippines in 1990 approximately at 45%. After that, the Malaysia expected to reach at above 80% in year 2040. Further, the Philippines reached at above 50% in future is expected.
Moving on, the Thailand in 2000, reached around at 25 % as similar to Indonesia. After that both incresed dramatically till the year 2020 it reached at 50% and 30% and expected that to reach 60% and 50% in year 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, presenting an overview and identifying key trends, such as the significant growth in Malaysia and the lower figures for Thailand. However, the information is only partially accurate and suffers from confusing phrasing and data misinterpretations. For instance, the student refers to the countries as 'cities' in the overview, and confuses specific data points, such as stating that Thailand and Indonesia are expected to reach certain levels in the year 2020 when 2020 is a past year on the timeline and 2030/2040 are the projection years. Furthermore, some comparisons are underdeveloped or unclear, preventing a fully developed response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, beginning with an introduction and an overall statement, followed by body paragraphs. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression and logical flow between ideas. Cohesive devices are used somewhat mechanically or inaccurately, such as 'To strat with' and 'Moving on', and referencing is occasionally unclear, which disrupts the progression of information. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal organisation of sentences within paragraphs lacks smooth logical sequencing.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as 'Asisn' instead of Asian, 'percdentage', 'strat' instead of start, and 'enrolment' used incorrectly to describe population proportions. Word choice and collocation are frequently imprecise, for example stating that Thailand has the smallest 'enrolment' throughout the period. These errors occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader and reveal a restricted control of appropriate terminology for describing graphical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text shows a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences or awkward attempts at complex ones that are frequently faulty, such as 'Thailand and indonesia figure between 10 to 20 in 1970.' There are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, including missing articles, incorrect prepositions ('at above 80%'), tense confusion (mixing past data with future projections incorrectly), and subject-verb agreement issues ('the Malaysia expected'). These frequent errors frequently strain comprehension for the reader.
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