Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrates the guidelines the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in the cities from 1970 to 2020, and after their pridiction for 2030 and 2040.

Overall, it is clear that steeply rise of population percentage in Malaysia. Similarly , gradually increase the living population in the Thailand and it very common for different asian countries.

In 1970, the residents of malaysia at 30% after that their population increase about 10% in 1980. In the same way their population gradually rise still 2020 atleast reach at the 78%. And most of the scientist and people are expected that their population will be increased in the coming next 20 years. About the in infomation their inhabitants increased about 90% in 2040. Similarly, all other countries also rise their populations but in different other ways.

The community of philippines is just 31% in 1970 is rise till 1990 after that their population is decrease in 2010 after that there citizens will be acpected increase in 2040. Similarly indonesia and thailand are also high their individuls with the passage of time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially, presenting a rudimentary summary of the visual data. While the candidate attempts to report main features and comparisons, the information provided contains significant inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the figures shown in the graph. For instance, the reference to Malaysia's population reaching ninety percent in 2040 lacks precision based on the actual trends, and details regarding other countries such as the Philippines and Indonesia are vague or confused. Furthermore, the overview is limited and lacks clarity, failing to adequately highlight the broader trends across all four nations. To achieve a higher score, the response would need to present a clearer, more accurate overview of the main trends and select key features with greater precision and factual alignment to the source material.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The organization of the text displays some overall progression, but the logical flow is frequently disrupted by mechanical and inadequate cohesive devices. Paragraphing is attempted, with separate blocks for the introduction, overview, and body details, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak. Phrases such as 'In the same way' and 'Similarly' are overused and sometimes applied incorrectly where contrast or different trends are being described. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow which country or data point is being discussed. To improve in this criterion, the writer needs to ensure a smoother, more logical progression of ideas and utilize a wider, more accurate range of cohesive devices to connect sentences and paragraphs naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and basic, restricting the response's ability to discuss the data with precision. There are numerous word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'pridiction' instead of 'prediction', 'steeply rise' instead of 'steep rise', and 'individuls' instead of 'individuals'. The candidate attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts are often inaccurate or inappropriate in collocation and form, which can cause some strain for the reader. To reach a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range, demonstrate better control over word forms (such as nouns and verbs), and reduce spelling errors by using more standard academic vocabulary suited to describing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical structures used are very limited in range, consisting mostly of simple and frequently faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including issues with subject-verb agreement, missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect prepositions, and awkward sentence construction, such as in 'the residents of malaysia at 30%' and 'all other countries also rise their populations'. Punctuation is also inconsistently handled. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning in several places. To improve, the candidate needs to practice forming accurate simple and complex sentences, pay closer attention to verb tenses appropriate for past data and future predictions, and ensure better structural control.

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