Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph provides the information anout the percentage of the poeple in four different asian countries [ Philippines, Malaysia,Thailand, Indonesia] who are living in cities from 1970 and 2020 and it also provided the future population analysis for 2030 and 2040.
overall, The total population percentage of malaysia increased drastically followed by indonesia .In contrast the percentage of Thailand and Philippines encountered some flactuations in between.
coming to the countries with highest total population percentage, People preferring malaysian and indonesian cities more . from 1970 to 1990 there is only a slight flactuation of the percentage however from 1990 to 2020 there is drastic increase of the population and there is no decrease in the populational analysis from 2030 to 2040.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, stopping short at 122 words. Regarding content, the student attempts to present an overview and mention trends for the four countries, but the information provided is very limited and contains inaccuracies. For instance, claiming that the population percentage for Malaysia increased drastically while Thailand and Philippines encountered fluctuations overlooks key details and comparative features across the timeframe. The overview is overly simplistic, and the overall development lacks the depth required to fully report the main features and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text demonstrates some basic organization, separating the introduction, an overview, and body details into separate paragraphs. However, there is no clear overall progression or sophisticated logical sequencing. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, and sometimes repetitive, such as relying heavily on basic transition phrases and loose sentence connections like 'coming to the countries'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, meaning information does not flow smoothly from one point to the next.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, with noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the response. Examples of errors include misspelling 'anout' for 'about', 'poeple' for 'people', 'asian' without capitalization, and 'flactuations' for 'fluctuations'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'drastically' and 'population analysis', but these choices reflect limited control over collocations and word forms, leading to minor communication strains for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are issues with capitalization, such as 'overall, The', and missing articles or incorrect prepositions in phrases like 'from 1970 and 2020' instead of 'between 1970 and 2020'. Attempts at more complex phrasing result in faulty syntax and frequent errors in punctuation and agreement, which can occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.
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