Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the line graph illuustes how populatoin in four asian countries living in cities changed from 1970 to 2020 percentage of toatal populatoin

body1

the populatoin of malaysia increased radidly from under 30% to over 70% between 1970 to 2020. a rise of about 10 percentage of 10 years.

body2

in addition there is a declined in the populatoin of philippines from 1070 and 2020 increased araund 70% in 10 years

body2

morever there is a climed in the populatoin of thailand from 1970 and 2020 drameticaly over 40% in 10 years

morever there is a climed in the populatoin of thailand from 1970 and 2020 drameticaly over 40% in 10 years

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, stopping short at 111 words. While the student attempts to describe trends in Malaysia, the Philippines, and Thailand, the content is severely restricted. Important features are missing or inaccurate, such as misinterpreting the dates and values (e.g., citing '1070' instead of 1970, and making inaccurate claims about population percentages). Furthermore, the response completely misses data regarding Indonesia and lacks a proper overview of the main trends. Ideas are extremely limited and under-developed, resulting in a minimal response to the task prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently. The structure is heavily disrupted by fragmented sentences, labeled section headers like 'body1' and 'body2', and repeated paragraphs (the sentence about Thailand is duplicated verbatim). There is a lack of clear logical progression throughout the text. While basic linking devices such as 'in addition' and 'morever' are attempted, cohesive devices are inadequate, inaccurate, and repetitively deployed. Paragraphing is not used effectively or appropriately, as individual body points are broken down into single, disjointed lines.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, utilizing words such as 'populatoin', 'increased', and 'climed'. There are frequent spelling errors ('illuustes', 'populatoin', 'radidly', 'araund', 'morever', 'climed', 'drameticaly') and inaccurate word choices that strain the reader's comprehension. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate at best, with no successful deployment of less common vocabulary or precise collocations to describe visual data trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple attempts that contain frequent errors. There is a complete lack of punctuation at the beginning of the text, and capitalisation is omitted throughout. Errors occur in prepositions and time markers (e.g., 'from 1970 to 2020' versus 'between 1970 to 2020' and 'from 1070 and 2020'), and sentence boundaries are blurred. These frequent grammatical and mechanical errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning.

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