Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given graph show the data of the percentile of the people who are living in urban areas from 1970 to 2020 with the forecasting for 2030 and 2040 of for countries in asia.

To beging with, the percentage of Malaysia rose significantly from 30% to more than 70% from 1970 to 2020 and hope to increase in upcoming decades as well.The percentage also increases from around 5% to around 45% in Indonesia and it might will be increased in upcoming years upto 60%.

On the other hand, in the Philippines there was fluctuation between 1980 to 2010.In Thailand the percentage rise sligthly throughout every decade from around 15 percent to about 30% and there percentafe will be gradual increased in 2040.

Overall, there is rise in percentage of the each country however there was a significant rise in the numbers in Malaysia and the most normal rise in percentage was seen in Philippines. According to the forecast there will be rise in percentage in 2030 to 2040 in each country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several relevant overall patterns: Malaysia rises strongly, Indonesia grows rapidly, and the Philippines fluctuates, while all four countries are expected to increase. These points address the main subject of the graph. However, some figures and comparisons are inaccurate or too vague. Indonesia starts at about 14%, not around 5%, and reaches about 52% in 2020, rather than around 45%; its 2040 projection is about 64%, not 60%. The Philippines also rises to around 48% in 1990 before declining, a key feature that could be stated more clearly. Your overview that Malaysia has the strongest rise is sound, but “the most normal rise” in the Philippines is unclear. Include more precise comparisons and develop the trends across the full period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs describing selected countries, and a concluding overview. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Overall” help signal shifts between points. The organisation is generally understandable, but the progression is not always clear: Malaysia and Indonesia are grouped together, while the Philippines and Thailand are discussed in a way that makes their comparisons difficult to follow. The conclusion also repeats the general idea that every country will rise without adding a useful comparison. Some transitions feel mechanical, and punctuation spacing makes the text harder to read. Grouping countries by contrasting trends and using clearer references to dates and figures would make the progression more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “rose significantly,” “fluctuation,” “gradual,” and “forecast.” This gives you a basic range for reporting trends. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “the most normal rise,” “hope to increase,” and “the percentage of the people.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “beging,” “sligthly,” and “percentafe,” which reduce precision. Aim for standard graph-description phrases and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a trend as “increased steadily” or “showed the smallest rise,” rather than using an unclear expression such as “most normal rise.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, and the main message is usually understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “The given graph show” needs subject–verb agreement, while “it might will be increased” combines incompatible modal and verb forms. “There is rise in percentage of the each country” also has problems with the article and noun phrase. Some sentences run together without appropriate spacing after full stops, as in the transition from the Malaysia sentence to the next point. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions for historical data and use “is expected to” for forecasts. Greater control of these basic patterns would make your meaning clearer.

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