Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compare the percentage of the population in four Asian countries Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia are living in urban area between 1970 and 2020. Additionally, It shows the prediction for 2030 and 2040.

It is clear that the proportion of the population who used to live in cities increased in each country over the period shown. Overall, a much larger percentage of Philippinese and Malaysia had used to live in cities in comparison with Thailand, and Indonesia the fastest migration toeard the urbanization.

In 1970, the porportion of people using living in urban area in the Philipines was arount 32%. The figure for Thailand and indonesia were lower, at about 18 and 19% and The proportion for Malaysia is 30%. In 2000, prefering to living in urban area gradually rise in this year and reached at 20% to 60% respectively for four nation. Moreover, In year 2040 the number risen and reached uoto 60% for Indonesia, 40% Thailand, 50% for Malaysia and 80% in

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a broad overview that urbanisation rises, but the report only partially presents the main features and contains important inaccuracies. For example, Indonesia is shown at about 14% in 1970, not 19%, and the 2000 figures are not a uniform rise “from 20% to 60%”: they range from roughly 30% to 60%. The final comparison is also inaccurate: by 2040 Malaysia is highest at about 84%, while the Philippines is around 56%, Indonesia 64%, and Thailand 50%; the response gives different figures and leaves its last comparison unfinished. Develop a clear overview of the countries’ contrasting trajectories and report accurate key comparisons across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some basic organisation: an introduction is followed by an overview and then a paragraph with selected figures. However, progression is difficult to follow because the comparisons jump between years and the 2000 sentence is unclear about which figures belong to which countries. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In 2000,” and “Moreover” provide some signposting, but “Moreover” does not clarify the relationship between the points, and the final sentence breaks off after “80% in”. Use separate, complete comparisons in a logical sequence—for example, historical trends first and forecasts second—and ensure each figure is clearly linked to its country. This would make the report easier to follow without relying on connectors alone.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “proportion,” “increased,” and “prediction,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret, such as “prefering to living in urban area” and “the fastest migration toeard the urbanization.” There are also repeated spelling and word-form errors, including “porportion,” “Philipines,” “Philippinese,” and “arount.” Prefer precise, conventional language for describing data, such as “the proportion living in urban areas,” “rose,” and “is projected to reach.” Check country names and spelling carefully, and avoid using “migration” when the graph measures the share of residents living in cities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentence forms, including “It is clear that…” and “In 1970…,” but control is inconsistent and errors frequently affect clarity. The opening has a subject–verb agreement problem (“The line graph compare”) and an awkward clause structure (“four Asian countries … are living”). In the overview, “Philippinese and Malaysia had used to live” has faulty tense and agreement. Other examples include “the figure … were” and “reached at,” while the final sentence is incomplete. Most sentences rely on basic patterns, and the attempts at more complex structures are often inaccurate. Build shorter, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, tense, and sentence endings; then add more varied structures once these are reliable.

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