Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the percentage of the pupulation in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predicition for 2030 and 2040.

Overall, the proportion of population living in cities was the highest in Malaysia, whereas Philippines, Thailand and Indonesia also increased over the period, but they were lowest as compared with Malaysia. Despite that, the prediction indicate the population will gradually increased in all four countries by 2030 and 2040.

In 1970, the were living in Indonesia was the least at 11%, whereas it increased significantly to 40% by 2010, it rose to 50% population in following decade. The prediction show that it will gradually rise to 60% by 2040. However, in 1970, the proportion of Thailand was slightly higher (19%) then Indonesia. It rose to roughly at 29% population and remainded stable at 30%, till 2020, in future the population will increase and reaching to 50%.

Turning to Philippines it began with 30% of population in 1970, and this keep fluctuated between 50% to 40% population till 2010, from that it will increase steadly and reaching, approximate at 52% population which will lower quite lower than Indonesia. The percentage of people living in Malaysia at just 30% in 1970, it rose slowly to 45% by 1990. The significant growth was showed between 2000 and 2020, it surged 20% to roughly 75% respectively. By 2040, it increased gradually and reaching to more than 80% which will be highest than other 3 countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the full time span and all four countries, and your overview identifies Malaysia as the highest and notes that the figures are generally expected to rise. Several comparisons are supported by relevant data, such as Malaysia’s increase from about 30% to over 80%. This meets the task well, with some features reported in useful detail. However, a few figures and trends are inaccurate: Indonesia was about 14% in 1970, not 11%, and reached roughly 64% by 2040, rather than 60%; the Philippines peaked at about 48% in 1990, not around 50% through 2010. The overview also overlooks Indonesia’s strong rise and the Philippines’ fluctuation. More precise selection and comparison would strengthen the report further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs grouping Indonesia with Thailand and then the Philippines with Malaysia. This makes the main comparisons reasonably easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Turning to.” At times, though, connections between ideas are awkward or unclear. For example, “In 1970, the were living in Indonesia” does not clearly introduce the figure, and the long sentence beginning “The significant growth was showed” joins several points without effective punctuation. Some transitions, including “Despite that,” do not express the relationship precisely. Use clearer topic sentences and divide complex comparisons into shorter, logically connected sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “fluctuated,” “surged,” and “gradually,” and these choices help describe changes over time. There are also attempts to vary expressions for increases rather than repeating one verb throughout. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the population will gradually increased,” “the significant growth was showed,” and “which will be highest than.” Spelling errors in “pupulation,” “predicition,” “remainded,” and “steadly” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, conventional chart language—for example, “the proportion rose” or “the figure is projected to reach”—and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “which,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure and verb forms are frequent enough to make some passages difficult to read. Examples include “the were living in Indonesia,” “it increased significantly to 40% by 2010, it rose to 50%,” and “it will increase and reaching to 50%.” There are also problems with agreement and tense, as in “the prediction indicate” and “this keep fluctuated.” Work on complete sentence boundaries, consistent past tense for historical data, and correct future forms such as “is predicted to reach.” Greater control of these patterns would make your comparisons clearer.

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