Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The Graph showes the Population of people which are living in urban area of four Different countries from 1970 to 2020 and predict that how much of the citizen of the country will live in cities in 2030 and 2040.

In 1970 Indonesia population which live in cities are lower than the Philippines , Malaysia and Thailand which comes in under 15% where as thailand comes under the 20% whereas Phillipines and Malaysia are about the same at 30% of there Countries Population .

In Year 2000 Indoesian And Thailand Population are a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and gives a few relevant starting figures: Indonesia is placed below 15%, Thailand below 20%, and the Philippines and Malaysia at about 30% in 1970, which broadly matches the data. However, it stops partway through a sentence about 2000 and provides no completed account of the main trends, no overview, and no meaningful comparisons across the period or forecasts. The task requires at least 150 words, and this response is 93 words, so it is substantially under length. To improve, complete the report and summarise the key patterns: Malaysia rises to the highest level, Indonesia grows sharply, while the Philippines fluctuates before rising again and Thailand increases more gradually.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise information chronologically, moving from 1970 to 2000, and the opening sentence establishes the topic. However, the response has no clear paragraph structure or completed progression: it ends with “In Year 2000…” and an unfinished clause, leaving the reader without a conclusion or overview. Connections between ideas are also limited; “whereas” is used to contrast the 1970 figures, but the relationships among the countries’ later trends are not developed. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main details, and group countries or periods logically. Complete each sentence and use clear links such as “by contrast,” “thereafter,” and “by 2040” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “population,” “urban area,” “citizen,” and “predict,” and attempts to describe comparisons with “lower than” and “about the same.” However, several choices are imprecise or repetitive: “Population of people” is redundant, “citizen” is not the right term for a proportion of residents, and “how much of the citizen” is awkward. Spelling and capitalisation errors—such as “showes,” “Indoesian,” “Phillipines,” and unnecessary capitals—also reduce accuracy. Use standard chart language such as “the proportion of the population living in cities,” “urban population,” “stood at,” and “is projected to reach.” This would make the limited description clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentence structures, including a comparison joined with “whereas,” but control is weak and the final sentence is incomplete: “In Year 2000 Indoesian And Thailand Population are a…” The opening also has problems with agreement and sentence construction (“The Graph showes…”), while “Indonesia population which live in cities are lower” contains mismatched singular/plural forms and an unclear relative clause. Articles and possessives are also unreliable in phrases such as “the citizen of the country” and “there Countries Population.” These errors make parts of the report difficult to follow. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add comparisons; check subject–verb agreement, articles, plural forms, and punctuation, and ensure every sentence is complete.

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