Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrate population of the Asian nations living in four different types of cities which is Phillippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indinesia with their proportion from 1970 to 2040.

Overall, it is clear that highest population had Malaysia at proportion about 80 in 2040, while the following least percentage had Thailand which was around 45%, compare any other cities Philippines and Indonesia had poppulation was between according to above two cities.

According to graph Philippience and Malaysia had population of proprostion same lead which was 30% in 1970, while Indonesia had least population ratio 10% following year. In addition, Malasia and Indonesia both cities changes were significantly, in 2040 the proportion of Indonesia had ratio below 60% and Malaysia had lead 80%.

In terms of Thailand and Philippines both were fluctuated following year, the perpotion of population of Thailand 20% in 1970, the prortion of poppulation which two cities Indonesia and Philippines had same ratio 40% in 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the four countries and give a broad overview, noting Malaysia’s leading position by 2040 and Thailand’s comparatively low figure. However, the overview is unclear in places, and the report only partially selects and compares the main features. Some figures are inaccurate: in 1970, the Philippines was about 32%, Malaysia 30%, and Indonesia 14%, rather than the Philippines and Malaysia sharing the lead and Indonesia being at 10%. The claim that Thailand and the Philippines both fluctuated is only partly supported: Thailand rose gradually, while the Philippines rose, fell, then recovered. You also mention the 2010 similarity between Indonesia and the Philippines, but omit the major contrast that Malaysia rose steadily to over 80% while Indonesia grew rapidly from the lowest starting point. Select these key trends and report them more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about the countries, and phrases such as “Overall” and “In addition” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is difficult to follow because comparisons shift abruptly and some sentences are unclear, particularly “the proportion of population of Thailand 20% in 1970” and the final sentence about two countries having the same ratio. Linking expressions are sometimes used without making the relationship between ideas clear. Organise the body by meaningful comparisons—for example, Malaysia and Indonesia’s contrasting growth, followed by the Philippines and Thailand—and use clear references and transitions to connect each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “fluctuated,” and “significantly,” and use some relevant terms to describe change. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand, such as “population of the Asian nations living in four different types of cities” and “had population of proprostion same lead.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “Phillippines,” “Indinesia,” “Malasia,” and “poppulation,” which reduce clarity. Use precise chart language and avoid repeating “population” when “urban share” or “figure” is more suitable. Check spelling carefully and choose natural combinations such as “the proportion living in cities” and “rose to.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and some longer structures, including a sentence beginning “while” and an overview introduced by “Overall.” However, grammatical errors are frequent, and attempts to combine ideas often produce incomplete or confusing sentences. For example, “The graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the following least percentage had Thailand” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Articles and sentence patterns are also problematic in “According to graph” and “the proportion of population of Thailand 20% in 1970.” These errors sometimes make the intended comparisons hard to follow. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then add subordinate clauses; check agreement, articles, and that every sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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