Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrate the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to2020 and the prediction of 2030 to2040 are given in line chart

at the galance bar chart shows people are living in for asian countries from 1970 to 2030 the percentage of population rapidly increased line chart illustrate the prediction of population from 2030 to 2040 in prediction percentage of population also increased rapidly

line chart shows philippines and malaysia. malaysia population are increased from 1970 to 2020 in 1970 population is 30% after that in 1990 to 2020 the population sharply increased the prediction of the population 2030 to 2040 increased nearly 80% same as with philippines there percentage of population similary imcreased

thailand and indonesia population are under stressed from 1990 to 2020 but in future prediction is they both can b increased in 2040 the population of thailand reached nearly 50% and indonesia population reached at above 60 %

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and mention several relevant trends, including Malaysia’s rise and the projected figures for Thailand and Indonesia. However, the response gives only a limited account of the graph and does not clearly summarise its main comparisons. For example, Malaysia is described as reaching “nearly 80%” in 2030–2040, but the figures are about 81% and 83.5%; Indonesia is projected to exceed 60%, while Thailand reaches about 50%. The claim that Thailand and Indonesia were “under stressed” from 1990 to 2020 is unclear, and the Philippines’ pattern is not explained with figures. There is also no clear, accurate overview of the countries’ relative positions. The response is 146 words, below the required 150.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some paragraphing and attempts to group the countries: the final paragraph discusses Thailand and Indonesia, while the preceding one focuses on the Philippines and Malaysia. This gives the reader a basic sense of how the information is divided. However, progression is difficult to follow because the opening repeats the task description and then refers inconsistently to a “bar chart” and a “line chart.” Connections between ideas are often unclear, as in “same as with philippines,” and the response does not move systematically from an overview to well-organised details. Use a concise introduction, a separate overview, and body paragraphs that compare the countries in a clear order, with accurate linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant graph vocabulary, including “percentage,” “prediction,” “increased,” and “reached,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. For instance, “under stressed” does not communicate a clear trend, and “population are increased” is not a natural way to describe the urban share. “At the galance” appears to be an inaccurate attempt at “at a glance.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “similary imcreased” also reduce clarity. Aim to use precise trend language, such as “rose steadily,” “fluctuated,” or “was projected to reach,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements and shows limited control of sentence structure. Errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “The line graph illustrate,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “Malaysia population are increased,” which has problems with both the possessive form and verb construction. The opening sentence also lacks clear punctuation and has an incomplete structure, while phrases such as “the prediction of 2030 to 2040 are given” use an awkward tense and construction. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “while” and “whereas.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, possessives, and sentence boundaries.

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