Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram below show that the percentage of the population living in Asain countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Overall, 4 asain countries on which malaysia accounts for the highest figure on population. Philippines, Thailand and Indonesia are fluctated between each other overall they also created a midium range of population.

In 1970 malaysia had started his range from 30% of population then climbed towards highest figure at 85% in 2030 and 2040. Philippines also started his range from 30% on population then it go into 48% in 1990, philippines suddenly started falling again 42% in 2010 then it again back on track in 2030 its 55% and 2040 its 57%.

Moving towards Thailand and Indonesia both were started in 18% and 15% its was slowly going upwards then both are clashed in 2000 on 30%, after that indonesia had went upwards but again its clashed in 45% with Philippines in 2010, then it is going till 60% in 2030 and 2040. Thailand has plummed into 2030 and 2040 is

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and make an attempt to summarise several countries, including Malaysia’s overall rise and the Philippines’ rise and subsequent dip. However, the overview is unclear and includes an inaccurate claim that Malaysia reaches 85%: the chart shows about 83.5% in 2040, and the peak is not in both 2030 and 2040. Several figures and comparisons are also imprecise, such as saying the Philippines reaches 57% in 2040 rather than about 55.5%. Most importantly, the final sentence about Thailand is unfinished, so its later trend is not reported. To improve, give a clear overview of the main contrasts and accurately cover the projected figures for all four countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has paragraph breaks and broadly moves from an introduction to an overview and then country details. Grouping the Philippines and Malaysia before discussing Thailand and Indonesia is a useful organising choice. However, progression is weakened by unclear statements such as “Philippines, Thailand and Indonesia are fluctuated between each other,” and the final paragraph ends abruptly with “Thailand has plummed into 2030 and 2040 is”. Linking phrases such as “Moving towards” and “after that” are used, but they do not always make the relationships between trends clear. Use a concise overview, then organise details into clear comparisons, and ensure each paragraph and sentence is complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “predictions,” “climbed,” and “falling,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing changes over time. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the account difficult to follow: “midium range of population,” “clashed” for two lines meeting, and “plummed” for a downward trend. Spelling errors such as “Asain” and “fluctated” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, conventional language for graphs, such as “urban population,” “rose,” “declined,” “levelled off,” and “converged,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and some basic clauses communicate the intended trend. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make several statements hard to interpret. For example, “The diagram below show” needs subject–verb agreement, while “both were started in 18% and 15%” has an incorrect passive construction. “Malaysia had started his range” also uses an unsuitable tense and pronoun, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise describing chart data with accurate past-tense forms for historical years and “is projected to” for forecasts. Keep comparisons in complete, clearly punctuated sentences.

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