Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates the proportion of the population living in urban areas in four nations from [redacted phone] and will increased upcoming year 2030 and 2040.

Overall, malaysia population growth gradualy increasd over the period,while

philippines nation fluatate during the years and decreased ahead.Remain follow thailand same tend However,steadily rise in the future.indonaesia papulation steadily rising over years.

It is evident that, malaysia population flutuate in the year 1970 to 2000,after gra

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the general subject and attempts an overview, noting Malaysia’s rise and fluctuations in the Philippines. However, it does not adequately summarise the graph: there are almost no usable figures or comparisons, and the final sentence is cut off (“after gra…”). Some claims are also inaccurate or unclear: Malaysia rises overall rather than fluctuating across 1970–2000, and the Philippines does not simply decrease ahead, as it is projected to rise to about 56% by 2040. The trends for Thailand and Indonesia are mentioned only vaguely. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. Include a complete overview and select key figures to compare the four countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and then an overview, followed by a detail paragraph. This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is compressed into a series of incomplete or loosely connected statements, such as “Remain follow thailand same tend However, steadily rise in the future.” The final paragraph ends mid-sentence, so the information is not brought to a clear conclusion. Cohesive links such as “Overall” and “However” are attempted, but their relationships are not always clear. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and selected comparisons, and connect each point explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “population,” “urban areas,” “gradually,” and “steadily rising.” These choices show an attempt to describe trends rather than simply list countries. However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the intended wording difficult to recognise, for example “fluatate,” “flutuate,” “indonaesia,” and “papulation.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “will increased upcoming year” and “same tend.” The range is limited, with repeated use of “population” and “rise,” and there is little vocabulary for comparing levels or describing changes. Practise accurate trend language and use alternatives such as “increase,” “climb,” and “remain relatively stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts several sentence forms, including an introductory sentence and an overview beginning with “Overall,” but control of sentence structure is weak. Verb forms are incorrect in “will increased,” and the phrase “from 1970-2020 and will increased upcoming year 2030 and 2040” lacks a clear grammatical construction. The overview contains fragments and unclear clause connections, particularly “Remain follow thailand same tend However, steadily rise in the future.” Punctuation and spacing also make sentence boundaries difficult to identify. These problems frequently obscure the intended meaning, and the response shows little evidence of accurate complex structures. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense and punctuation before finishing.

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