Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given line graph demonstrates the ratio of the total population who is living in fous Asian countries in between 1970 to 2020, also predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Overall,figure of malaysia population was recorded highest , wherese, Thiland was accounted as lowest in all the given period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart as covering four Asian countries and includes an overview, noting Malaysia as highest and Thailand as lowest. However, the overview is not fully accurate: Thailand is the lowest only at the beginning; by 2040 the Philippines is higher than Thailand, and Malaysia is not highest in every year because the Philippines leads in 1970. No figures or meaningful trend details are reported, so the main changes and comparisons are largely missing. The response also contains only 48 words, below the required 150, leaving the task minimally addressed. To improve, describe the contrasting rises, the Philippines’ fluctuation, and the projected figures, supporting the overview with selected data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction and an overview, and “Overall” signals the second paragraph’s purpose. However, the response ends after these two brief statements, so there is no progression through the chart’s main features or comparisons. The opening sentence is also difficult to follow because several ideas are compressed into one sentence, while the overview’s comparison is too broad to guide the reader accurately. Develop a clear sequence: introduce the chart, summarise the overall patterns, then compare the countries’ changes over time in separate, logically connected points. Use linking expressions to show contrasts and time periods rather than relying on a single overview marker.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a few relevant terms, including “line graph,” “population,” “predictions,” and “Overall,” so the topic is recognisable. However, vocabulary is very limited for describing data, and several choices or spellings reduce clarity: “ratio” is not the most suitable term for a percentage, “fous” and “Thiland” are misspelled, and “figure of malaysia population” is an awkward phrase. Build a more precise range for trends and comparisons, such as “the proportion living in cities,” “rose steadily,” “fluctuated,” and “was projected to reach.” Accurate country names and natural collocations would make the limited information easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts two sentence forms, including a complex opening with “also predictions for 2030 and 2040,” and the overall meaning can be inferred. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. In “the total population who is living,” the relative pronoun and verb do not fit the noun “population”; “in between 1970 to 2020” combines incompatible prepositions; and “Overall,figure” lacks a space after the comma. The second sentence also has unclear clause structure and agreement in “was accounted as lowest.” Practise accurate sentence patterns for chart introductions and comparisons, for example, “The graph shows the percentage of people living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040.”

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