Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The below gives informations about percentages of population in four different asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with the prediction for 2030 and 2040.Here we can summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

overall it can be seen that percentage of population living in the city of philipines is 30% in 1970,in 1980 it will remain stable and in 1990 increase quikly at 50% then in 2010 it decrease 40% and fluctuate.Population of Malaysia is 30% in 1970 and small rise in 1980 to 40% rise sharply from 2000 to 2040.

Furthermore percentage of Thailand is 20% in start in 1970 and a slight increase in 1990 than then remain stable in 2010,2020,2030 then raise sharply in 2040.when we see the graph of Indonesia it start in 1970 to 12% and increase in 2000 then quickly increase in 2030 to 2040 from 50 to 60 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify all four countries and include some relevant figures, such as Malaysia rising from about 30% to over 80% and Indonesia increasing substantially. However, the account is incomplete and several trends are inaccurate: the Philippines reaches its high point around 1990, then falls before recovering, rather than simply fluctuating; Thailand rises gradually after 1990, not only in 2040; and Indonesia’s sharp growth begins well before 2030. There is no clear, accurate overview comparing the countries’ overall trajectories. The response also contains 136 words, below the required 150, which limits the detail provided. Select the main trends accurately and add a concise overview before supporting it with key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the chart and then discusses the Philippines and Malaysia before moving to Thailand and Indonesia. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and phrases such as “Furthermore” and “when we see” attempt to connect ideas. However, the opening repeats the task instructions rather than establishing a useful overview, and the body does not develop a clear progression of comparisons. Several sentences combine multiple years and trends without clear links, while “overall” is used to introduce country-specific details rather than a summary of the main features. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped comparisons, and connect related trends explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “remain stable,” “increase,” “decrease,” and “rise sharply,” so the reader can generally understand the topic. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, repetitive, or informal, including “informations,” “summerise,” “quikly,” and “raise sharply.” Phrases such as “in start” and “small rise” are also not natural in this context. These errors make the description less precise, particularly when distinguishing gradual change from sharp growth. Build a wider set of accurate trend expressions and use standard spelling; for example, describe a figure as “climbing steadily” or “peaking before declining.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to describe changes across several time periods, but most sentences rely on simple structures, and attempts to link multiple trends often produce faulty grammar. For example, “in 1980 it will remain stable and in 1990 increase” shifts awkwardly between tenses and omits a subject before “increase.” The sentence beginning “when we see the graph of Indonesia” also lacks consistent tense and clear sentence structure. Punctuation and spacing are frequently inaccurate, as in “2040.Here” and “1970,in 1980.” Use the past tense for historical data and future forms for predictions, and practise complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs. These changes will make your comparisons easier to follow.

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