Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In different regions of the world, the majority of the people, where they are living, taking interested to determine the past features of old homes and buildings.

In my point of view, In old places are very beautiful. They show the culture of past people and how past people spent their lives. How they fought with other nations and occupied the the world. Some people also search the oled places for their knowldge. Many people interested in religious places to see how they loved with Islam or other religious. These are the few reasons about the people search for many typesof building and houses.

Moreover, The people searching the old places because different old places are very beautiful. The old places depicts the glorious of that time. one is the best examples is Taj Mahal and was buit by shahjahn who was the king of Hindustan. He built this strange for the memory of their beloved wife that she was died, when she was giving a baby birth.

Another examples is that shahi mosque in lahore. It was also made by mughal empire. This mosque is very impressive and more beautiful.

The old buildings and house are very impressive the show the living method of past people. They also show the that how people eat and hoe people do their business with other people.

These are the reasons why people can do search in old places.

Many more examples in europe countries which are very beautiful and more impressive than the buidlings in asian.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response gives several possible reasons for interest in historic buildings, including their beauty, cultural value, and what they reveal about past ways of life. The Taj Mahal and Lahore mosque are relevant examples, but the discussion is repetitive and some claims, such as people searching religious sites to learn how people “loved with Islam,” are unclear. Most importantly, the second part of the task—how people can research the history of their own home or building—is not answered. The response therefore addresses the topic only minimally rather than explaining both questions. To improve, give specific research methods, such as checking property records, consulting local archives, speaking with previous owners or neighbours, and using historical maps, then explain each briefly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic grouping of ideas: the opening introduces the topic, and later paragraphs discuss cultural interest and examples. However, the response does not develop in a clear sequence from reasons to research methods, and the final sentence about European buildings does not provide a conclusion or connect clearly to the task. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “These are the reasons” are used, but they do not create a coherent progression; “Moreover” also introduces a repeated point about beauty. Several sentences are difficult to follow because their relationships are unclear. Organise the essay into a clear introduction, a paragraph explaining reasons, a paragraph on practical research methods, and a brief conclusion, using references that make each point’s connection explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “culture,” “religious places,” “glorious,” and “living method,” and the examples show an attempt to discuss historical buildings. However, vocabulary is often repetitive, especially “old places,” “beautiful,” and “impressive,” and several inaccurate choices make meaning difficult to understand. For example, “taking interested” and “the glorious of that time” are not natural expressions, while “strange” appears to be an incorrect word for the Taj Mahal. Spelling errors such as “oled,” “knowldge,” and “buidlings” are also noticeable. Build a more precise vocabulary set for historical research and architecture, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing relies mainly on short, simple statements, with only limited attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences. Frequent errors in sentence formation and verb patterns sometimes obscure meaning. For instance, “the majority of the people, where they are living, taking interested” lacks a correctly formed main verb, and “Many people interested” is missing a verb. There are also problems with agreement and articles, as in “The old places depicts,” and with sentence boundaries and capitalization, such as “one is the best examples.” These errors make the response difficult to read in places. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences first, then add controlled complex structures using “because,” “which,” and “that.”

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