Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Yes thats right, in some countries people finding this about our home where he is live now. So thats reason people and society live there place why and when come to here.

From my perspective, Some europe countries people finding about our home histroy where he is live. Because europe countries people intrested where journey start and where now reached. Which kind of people live there place before he live.

People looking about our previous generation which people already there places and spends time there and thats the reason findng about our home history. Before where to move and live there places and how to move and making our home there places.

People mostly research about home. He check our previous hostry like about our mother and father asking if he didn't clearly tell him then he will search oldest men how live there society near. So he will tell everything about his home where to move and live there place.

Now i am giving example from on my home. My father and mother our child time spend in backwolrd area. Don't much opperunity in there places where my mother and father live. So my father move for work to another city and after some my father makes a shop. So my father living start in city and after some my father come to home and stay 2 days and again back to shop. So my father discuss my home now we move to city side because there have many opperuinty for working and chil studying so my father firstly rent home take and after sometime. The same house my father and we live there places thats the histroy of our home.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make a relevant attempt to explain why people investigate a home’s past, mentioning earlier residents, family history and the circumstances in which a family moved. The personal account of your father moving for work also gives the response a concrete example. However, the reasons are repeated rather than clearly explained, and the example mainly describes your family’s move instead of showing what people learn about a building’s history. The second question—how people can research the history—is only minimally addressed through asking parents or older local residents. Develop this part with specific methods, such as checking property records, old maps, archives or local newspapers, and explain how each method helps.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and a recognisable movement from general reasons to a personal example, so there is an attempt to organise the answer. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several paragraphs repeat the idea of asking about previous generations without adding a distinct point. Connections between ideas are often unclear, as in “Before where to move and live there places,” and references such as “he,” “there” and “our home” do not always make clear who or what is meant. The final example contains many events in sequence but lacks clear grouping. Give each paragraph one purpose, use clear topic sentences, and connect the steps in the example with precise time and cause-and-effect links.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “previous generation,” “history,” “move,” “work” and “opportunity,” and the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is repetitive, with “home,” “live” and “places” used frequently, and several word choices or spellings make meaning harder to understand. For example, “home history” is less precise than “the history of the house,” while “oldest men” does not clearly express the idea of older local residents. Spelling errors such as “histroy,” “intrested” and “opperuinty” also reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate topic-specific phrases and check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and events using simple clauses and some longer sentences, including a sequence beginning “So my father move for work to another city.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “people finding this,” “where he is live,” and “my father makes a shop”; these need forms such as “people are finding out,” “where he lives,” and “my father opened a shop.” Long sentences joined repeatedly with “and” are also difficult to follow. Practise accurate present and past-tense sentence patterns first, then combine ideas using controlled clauses and full stops.

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