Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Companies are showing there products are much better than others, in the form of advertisement. The reasons are behind this is increasing the sales competition. I think this is negative development. As this will disturb everyone's budget.

There is enough proof to show that advertising businesses in present days increased the sales of products. Increasing sale competition is one of the primary reason. Moreover, advertisement create a sense of urgency in individuals, so they can purchased those products quickly.

Increasing sales competition is one of the primary positive development, and individuals have more options in one particular thing. People have option where they want cheap or expensive products.

one of the primary reason behind negative development in advertising business is they will disturb everyone's budget. For example, last year when I saw one advertistment about one million perfume on L.C.D. My husband says he saw and heard about that perfume and he wanted when we bought that perfume our budget get disturb. we face a lot of problems because that perfume was way more expensive than we thought.

To conclusion, Advertistments about products or things have more negative points than positive, so that this negative development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks about the reasons for people researching the history of their homes and how they can do so. Instead, you wrote an essay about the negative impact of advertising on consumer budgets. Because you failed to address the task prompt entirely, the response cannot be assessed for task achievement in relation to the specific question asked. Additionally, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which further impacts the score. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your ideas directly answer the specific questions posed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the logical progression is weak because the content does not relate to the topic. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'To conclusion', but they are often used incorrectly or in a way that does not help the flow of ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure feels disjointed. To improve, focus on ensuring that each paragraph has a clear central topic sentence that directly relates to the prompt and that your ideas follow a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'products', 'sales', and 'negative development'. There are also issues with word formation and spelling, such as 'advertistment' and 'purchased' (used instead of 'purchase'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. To improve, try to learn collocations and synonyms for common words, and pay closer attention to the correct form of words (e.g., noun vs. verb forms).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'The reasons are behind this is', 'advertisement create', and 'when we bought that perfume our budget get disturb'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct verb tense usage, and practice constructing more complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions.

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