Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people are interested to find out the history of their house or building because they wanted know what are event was occurs in past to house or building where they live . However the event is good or bad because the reason are left by their elder to live their house or building . Their elder sacrifice and pay money for this so there is major reason for living in these house or in building they love to their elder value , customs and tradition . The people live in fears houses they know the value of their own house or building they wishes to gods they give him their own house . In history some example are also present people shed blood to their house . One example is that I am living in house it have old history my grandfather do work hard for this so, they easily live in their own house . I try my best to decorate my house I grew new plant for best environment and I also paint my house for their beautiful look . My father is also help me to make their house mo

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 194 words. This significantly impacts the development of the ideas. While the prompt asks for reasons and research methods, the essay only touches upon reasons in a fragmented way and completely fails to address how people can research their house's history. The ideas are underdeveloped, repetitive, and often unclear, such as the mention of 'fears houses' and 'wishes to gods'. Because the response is under-length and fails to address half of the prompt, it cannot reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure or logical progression. There are no distinct paragraphs, and the flow of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, making it difficult to follow the writer's train of thought. For example, the transition 'However the event is good or bad' does not logically connect to the previous sentence. The lack of paragraphing and the abrupt ending further contribute to the lack of coherence. The writing feels like a series of loosely related sentences rather than a cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. Phrases like 'what are event was occurs in past' and 'their elder sacrifice and pay money' demonstrate a lack of control over basic collocations and word forms. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the repetition of words like 'house' and 'building' shows a lack of lexical variety. There are no attempts at using less common or academic vocabulary, and the errors in word choice are persistent throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being ungrammatical, such as 'I am living in house it have old history my grandfather do work hard for this'. Subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and article usage are consistently problematic. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are often poorly constructed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further hinders the readability of the text.

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