Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

People are getting more and more artistic and also curious now a days. They are not only finding only a place where they can live rather they find for a place where they can take breathe peacefully, where they can spend time with serene and most importantly, where they can live with their family.

besides this, because of the availability of internet and technology, now people have easy access to all information and rushing after the job, after fulfilling the basic need ,many people want to run after their passion like collecting stamps, or making garden, or reading books or collecting coins and some are interested in old houses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, which severely limits your ability to address the prompt. You have failed to answer both parts of the question: the reasons for the interest in historical buildings and the methods for researching them. The content provided is tangential, focusing on general lifestyle choices rather than the specific topic of historical building research. Because the response is less than half the required length and fails to develop any relevant ideas, it does not meet the criteria for a passing band score. To improve, you must ensure you address every part of the prompt with specific, well-developed arguments and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction, body paragraphs, or conclusion. The transition 'besides this' is used to link ideas, but the ideas themselves are not logically connected to the prompt. The text reads more like a collection of loosely related sentences rather than a cohesive essay. Paragraphing is absent, which makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, you need to organize your response into clear paragraphs, each with a topic sentence, supporting evidence, and a concluding thought, using a wider range of cohesive devices to link your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'more and more' and 'run after' are informal and lack the precision required for an academic task. There is little attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary related to history, architecture, or research methods. The word choice is often imprecise, such as 'take breathe peacefully' instead of 'breathe peacefully' or 'find for a place' instead of 'look for a place'. To improve, you should focus on learning collocations and academic vocabulary related to common IELTS topics, and avoid using conversational or overly simplistic language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. There are issues with verb forms ('take breathe'), prepositions ('find for a place'), and sentence structure. The punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and spacing. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed compound sentences. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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