Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.
What are the reasons for this?
How can people research this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In few nations, many individual are becoming curious in search out about ancient of the home and residential where they living. There are various causes behind this. I will explore in ahead paragraph.
To begin with, the major reason is that people are want to know their parents and grandparents where they born. Because, they are feel past time period and related there tradition. Moreover, they are deeply concern about culture. Because, new generation do not follow rules and regulation according to their parents culture, such as, old marriages and function. In addition, due to modern life style many individual forget their past history where they born, like, old fashion, language etc.
On the other hand, people have lot of option to explore their past history back ground. First, they are gathering knowledge from ancient books and old people. Secondly, they are also finding past years calander it will help full to find history about their homes. Further more, they are search through internet it is more easy way to fin
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 171 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both parts of the prompt—reasons and research methods—the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient detail or examples. The explanation regarding why people research their history is vague, and the methods suggested are listed rather than explained. To improve, you must expand your points with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand', which helps to structure the response. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed due to grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is cut off abruptly, which disrupts the logical flow. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, fully developed central idea that connects smoothly to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'search out about ancient of the home' instead of 'researching the history of their homes' and 'finding past years calander'. These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to follow your meaning. To improve, you should focus on learning common collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary. Avoid using informal or incorrect phrasing and try to incorporate a broader range of topic-specific terms related to history and research.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('people are want to know'), incorrect verb forms ('they are feel'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. The incomplete final sentence also indicates a lack of control over sentence structure. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of tenses before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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