Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.
What are the reasons for this?
How can people research this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In few kingdoms, many individuals are becoming interested in searching about ancient house history or buildings they live in. There are many reasons for this.
On the one hand, there are many reasons for human finding old house details or buildings. Because they have interest to research for value of old house or buildings. They know the maintained and value of their property. They feel connected to historical places. They believe that they have need to understand about ancient soil. For example, RED FORT,AGRA,OLD STADIUM. The ancient house or building are very attractive and give more information about old lifestyles. Because these building or house decorated with many ideas and unique.
On the other hand, people can research various kind of apps such as, you tube with the help of find ancient house or buildings details. How to make it and amount of materials use in it. They searching on who can make it and value of the house or buildings. Local government help to investegate to ancient things like house
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 171 words. This significant under-length severely limits the development of ideas. While the response attempts to address both parts of the prompt—reasons for interest and methods of research—the ideas are presented in a very superficial and fragmented manner. The examples provided, such as 'RED FORT', are not integrated into a coherent argument, and the explanation of research methods is underdeveloped. To improve, you must expand your points with detailed explanations and relevant examples to meet the length requirement and demonstrate a more thorough exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into basic paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'Because' to start sentences, which creates a disjointed flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between ideas is abrupt. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'house', 'buildings', and 'reasons'. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'searching about ancient house history' and 'understand about ancient soil'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations and synonyms, and practice using more precise academic vocabulary to describe historical research and architectural interest.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with article usage ('the' is often missing), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure (e.g., 'They searching on who can make it'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence forms, which are necessary for higher band scores. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and the proper use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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