Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.
What are the reasons for this?
How can people research this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
For modern societies,few things are more crucial than people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of house or building.In both developed and developing countries,a considerable amount of effort is spent on looking information about house or building pepers documents, as it often requires the use of various resources,such as, buying house,pay tax,various bills,and so on.In today's worl,many would agree that modern society has nearly transcended its traditional boundaries and will soon become increasingly connceted in its pursuit access previous data about house or building.Nevertheless,it is undeniable that there are several underlying factore contribute to this issue,and a range of effective measures can be implemented to mitigate this challenges.
Naturally,lack of house documents papers in the form fof rapid growth is more harmful to a nation,especially,fot those with poorer-socio economic background.According to some studies,many people who are uneducated, imprudent and unaware of collects orginal papers contribute to the increase in people.Besides,many people are unawaed of the adverse consequence..As a result, these factors have become major contributors to this problem. Moreover,when ever people have real ducuments any time they can bought theru house and buildings also when people eant to buy house after that people want their rela douments.
On the other hand,to deal with theis drawbacks,however,lesson the negative effects of this issue can be introduce every level of education.Consequently,education individual could help rise moral awarness of this issue and encourage people to recognize the adverse consequence.The goverments can aslo implement various measurs such as,technology,post box,and so on.In addition,various measures such as,facebook,youtube,instagram,twitter,alonge side,television,newspaper have strong responsibility highlights the adverse consequence.
In conclusion,as this issue may seem impossible to eleminate completely and the danger of it is to great and to ignore,it is good idea for individuals and goverments to taken an interest in increasingly public awarness and implementing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding why people are interested in the history of their homes and how to research it, but it frequently wanders off-topic into vague discussions about paper documents, uneducated people, and general societal issues. While the student tries to provide reasons (such as bills, taxes, and home buying) and measures (such as education and technology), the development of these ideas is hindered by a lack of clarity and logical connection to the specific task prompt. The position is often unclear due to convoluted phrasing. Consequently, the task response aligns closely with Band 4.5 to 5.0 descriptors, showing partial addressing of the prompt with limited and underdeveloped ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, which visually mirrors standard essay structure. However, the internal coherence and logical progression are severely disrupted by disjointed sentences and abrupt shifts in topic, such as moving from house documents to uneducated individuals in the first body paragraph. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., 'Besides,' 'Moreover, when ever,' 'On the other hand, to deal with theis drawbacks, however'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of thought. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion of the paragraphs is weak, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. The student attempts some less common terms (e.g., 'transcended,' 'underlying factore,' 'socio economic background'), but these are misused or misspelled. There are numerous word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'collects orginal papers,' 'real ducuments,' and 'bought theru house.' Spelling mistakes ('worl', 'connceted', 'factore', 'fof', 'fot', 'unawaed', 'consequence.', 'ducuments', 'theis', 'goverments', 'awarness', 'eleminate') and grammatical word-form errors occur constantly, often straining the reader and impeding overall communication, which reflects a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on faulty attempts at complex structures that result in severe structural breakdowns and incomprehensible sentences (e.g., 'For modern societies,few things are more crucial than people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of house or building.'). Punctuation is frequently missing or misused, with spaces omitted after commas and periods. Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure are pervasive throughout the text, causing constant difficulty for the reader and placing the performance at Band 4.0.
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