Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, citizens becoming more interesting because they wants to know more about your city. In several countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building where they live in. I will give some reasons with support my conversation and give some examples relevant to the topic.

To commence with, technology develops many new or interesting things and individuals like them. To elaborate it, there are many old and historical thinks kept in the museum and every week a lot of tourists vist the museums and several people has a hobby to watch old thinks. To my every day experience and observation many people like old buildings or houses because the have a hobby and enjoy watching them. For instance, my best friend ali also love old building last time I went to lahore with him bacause it is very famous city there ar also many old buildings and houses and when we went there we saw many old buildings because he looks very stunning and my friend was spending a olot of time while watching each building but I was feeling boerd because I have not much knowledge about history then I realized everyone have diiferent intrests some people like old thinngs because they are intrested in them.

In conculsion, we should to know about our city or building history because it can help us to realizing and enjoying old or historical thinks specially our buildings or our homes we should to guide other people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding the reasons people research their homes and how they can do so. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat confused. For instance, the introduction of museums and general tourism does not directly answer why people specifically research the history of their own houses. The ideas are repetitive, focusing mainly on the vague notion that people have a hobby of watching old buildings. The example of visiting Lahore with a friend touches on personal experience, but it lacks clear connection to architectural research methods. Consequently, the response falls into the Band 5 category, as it addresses the task only partially with under-developed ideas and a position that is not always clearly articulated.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The organization of the essay shows some basic structure with an introduction, a body paragraph, and a conclusion. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the linking of ideas is frequently faulty or mechanical. Phrases such as 'To commence with' and 'To elaborate it' are used awkwardly. Paragraphing is poorly managed, as the body of the essay is lumped into one extremely long and dense paragraph that covers multiple shifting points without clear transitions. Furthermore, referencing is unclear at times, such as pronouns shifting abruptly between singular and plural forms (e.g., 'where they live in' and 'your city'). These cohesive and organizational flaws place the essay securely at Band 5.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by significant spelling and word-choice errors. Examples of basic or erroneous usage include 'thinks' instead of things, 'vist', 'boerd', 'diiferent', 'intrests', and 'conculsion'. There are also frequent grammatical-lexical collisions such as 'citizens becoming more interesting because they wants to know more about your city'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'stunning', the pervasive errors in spelling and collocation strain the reader and reflect the descriptors for Band 4, where basic and repetitive vocabulary and frequent errors limit effective communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying primarily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. There is a persistent lack of control over basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement errors ('citizens becoming', 'they wants', 'several people has', 'everyone have'), tense inconsistencies ('when we went there we saw... because he looks very stunning'), and prepositional errors ('where they live in'). Punctuation is also problematic, leading to run-on sentences that make comprehension difficult. Because errors are frequent, often causing difficulty for the reader and distorting meaning, the performance aligns with a Band 4 descriptor.

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