Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In few countries, most of the peoples are becoming interested to finding out about the history of the house or bulding where there are living, The reason behind this is the people have to know the secreats about the history as well as where they living in countries.

In resent years there was a construction of a bridge in during time of construction the people have found as a very intresting thing about the history and there was so many logics about research and knowledge and ganing about experiance about our history, After finding out things the people want to know about what is about history of houses .So this is the key reason why the peoples are more intresting to finding out history of houses .

The another key reason is in few years ago one of the most famous person has goen to there house after a long time and they have been find a most intresting books of there grandparents and the person has read the books, after reading a book the person has improve their there mind structure as well as the person has reach about some point about buildings to live in three lives.So this is the another relevant example from my knowledge or experience

It can be councluded that if any person can have dreams to achive goles in there history house they have be very pleasure about buildings why theyare living ,If a person have achivements in there history by reading a books is also a knowledge and gaining about history house if building in lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding why people are interested in the history of their houses and how they can research this. However, the development of ideas is extremely weak and frequently unclear. For instance, the reasons provided—such as finding secrets during a bridge construction or finding grandparents' books—are disjointed and confusing. The second part of the prompt, 'How can people research this?', is only tangentially touched upon with vague mentions of 'reading a book' and 'logics about research', rather than providing coherent research methods like archives, historical maps, or public records. Consequently, the ideas remain underdeveloped and hard to follow, resulting in a band score of 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay struggles significantly with overall organisation and logical progression. While paragraph breaks are attempted, the internal structure of each paragraph is highly confusing. The flow of ideas is frequently disrupted by major referencing errors and abrupt shifts in topic, such as jumping from house history to bridge construction and then to a famous person reading books. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately (e.g., 'The another key reason', 'It can be councluded that'). The relationship between sentences is often obscure, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the progression of thought. Therefore, the coherence and cohesion of the response align with the band 4 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student relies on elementary words and makes frequent word-choice errors, such as using 'peoples' instead of 'people', 'bulding' instead of 'building', and 'secreats' instead of 'secrets'. Furthermore, phrases like 'mind structure' and 'reach about some point' are unnatural and impede communication. There is little evidence of less common vocabulary, and recurrent spelling errors (e.g., 'resent' for 'recent', 'intresting', 'councluded', 'achive') further strain the reader and limit the lexical score to a 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, overly long, and convoluted sentences that lack proper grammatical boundaries. There are persistent, major errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'most of the peoples are', 'where there are living'), tense usage ('has goen', 'have been find'), and missing prepositions. Punctuation is also misused throughout the essay, leading to run-on sentences and comma splices. Because errors are frequent, systemic, and often distort the intended meaning, the grammar warrants a band score of 4.0.

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