Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the present era, an increasing number of people are taking interest in history. The residents of different countries implementing a research to find out about their ancient culture and the history of the houses or buildings where they live in. They can do this research with the help of archaelogical department.

First of all, history plays a vital role in human life. In recent years, many archaelogist have found old monuments, fossils and ancient jewellery items, which belongs to kings and queens. Their main reason, behind this research is that they want to understand about their traditons and how their ancestors was living in a past years. For instance, in India there are many historical monuments like forts, temples, tombs, caves and ancient cities. Scientists and archaelogists, collect the evidence and research on that, how all these places was created and in which years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is severely underdeveloped and falls well short of the 250-word minimum, containing only 145 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the writer touches on the reasons why people research history, such as wanting to understand traditions and how ancestors lived, the second part of the prompt regarding how people can research the history of their houses or buildings is largely ignored or misunderstood. The student briefly mentions the archaeological department, but fails to explain practical research methods specifically related to buildings. Due to the significant under-length and incomplete development of the second prompt requirement, the task achievement score is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response shows some basic organisation, dividing ideas into an introduction and a body paragraph. However, there is no clear overall progression or logical conclusion. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, such as using 'First of all,' without a subsequent 'secondly,' or using referencing like 'their main reason, behind this research' where the antecedent is slightly blurred. Paragraphing is also disrupted by the incomplete nature of the essay, as it stops abruptly after only two paragraphs. Overall, the structural framework is basic and inadequate for a full essay length.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and repetitive, with noticeable errors that affect fluency. For instance, the word 'archaelogist' is misspelled multiple times, and phrases like 'implementing a research' and 'how their ancestors was living in a past years' demonstrate awkward collocations and grammatical lexical interference. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'archaeological department', 'monuments', and 'fossils', the lack of precision and frequent spelling mistakes restrict the lexical score to this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The text displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple and flawed complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues such as 'how all these places was created' and 'where they live in' (where the preposition is redundant at the end of a relative clause in this context). Punctuation and comma splices also detract from control, such as the unnecessary comma in 'Scientists and archaelogists, collect the evidence'. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader.

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