Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.
What are the reasons for this?
How can people research this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
There is no denying fact that the phenomena of researching history about the habitate and building, wthere people live in. majority of folks are in the favour of this statement due to its number of merits. However, some of the prople highlight its demerits first. In my futher paragraphs, will be discuss the view, and I give my personal reason with logical conclusion.
Initiating with the reason of the same, the first and foremost reason is that, people want know abot the place where they live, they find that house is in better place or bad. Because nowadays most of the people believe in bad luck, if they do hard work to achieve great success in their life, but at the same time they could not aquire their goal so they feel its bad luck, therefore they first search details about house. For example, first they visit to astrology to find information to the house. Furthermore, some of the people search in google because its esy way to find any history about everything.
On the other hand, in my country most of the housing area built in historic place, for instance, Rajsthan, Uttrakhand, South India etc. so there most of place people found different kinds of detail about encient period. Like, statue, jewllry, so on. Last but not least, my point of view i do not believe in this and even individual should not focus in this.
In conclusion to the above statement, it is a mixed bag of positives and negatives. Hence, the should not be underestimated. In present era, people investigate informations about homes and apartment where they servive in.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing reasons why people research building history and how they do it. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat confused. For instance, the writer suggests people research history due to fears of 'bad luck' or consulting astrologers, which partially misses the broader cultural, architectural, or genealogical motivations typical of this topic. The position is also somewhat unclear, shifting in the conclusion. While the prompt is attempted, the reasoning lacks clarity and depth, aligning best with Band 5 descriptors where ideas are limited and under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays some overall structure with an introduction and conclusion, but the progression of ideas is hindered by abrupt transitions and poor paragraphing. The introduction contains heavily flawed framing sentences, and the main body paragraphs lack clear internal cohesion. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or awkward, such as 'Initiating with the reason of the same' and 'On the other hand, in my country most of the housing area built in historic place'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 4.5 to 5.0 performance.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily burdened by numerous word-choice and spelling errors that impede smooth reading. Examples of lexical errors include 'habitate' instead of habitat or home, 'wthere' instead of where, 'aquire' instead of acquire, 'esy' instead of easy, 'encient' instead of ancient, and 'servive' instead of survive. The range is limited and inadequate for precise expression, containing frequent noticeable errors, which places it firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student struggles significantly with grammatical range and accuracy. There are frequent sentence boundary errors, fragments, and heavy structural inaccuracies throughout the response, such as 'In my futher paragraphs, will be discuss the view, and I give my personal reason' and 'Hence, the should not be underestimated.' Simple sentences are prone to errors, and attempts at complex structures result in broken syntax and ungrammatical clauses. Communication is frequently strained due to these persistent errors, corresponding to Band 4.0.
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