Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In many Countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school continuing their education has increased, and the range of course available at universities and colleage has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

-> It is

In recent years, th.e number of people continuing their education after school has increase. In my views this is a positive development. In This essay will discuss whether this a positive development of number of students continuing there education after schools, Furthermore, range of course available at universities and Collage has also increase.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response fails to address the actual prompt provided in the task instructions. The student writes about whether higher education after school is a positive or negative development, which is a completely different prompt regarding university education, instead of discussing the history of houses and buildings and how to research them. Because the content is entirely off-topic and tangential to the actual historical research question, the response is limited minimally, with ideas failing to address the core requirements of the prompt. While the student attempts to formulate a position and present reasons, the misinterpretation of the task means the prompt's specific requirements regarding building history and research methods are completely missed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The text shows some organization with attempts at paragraphing, but there is no clear overall progression due to the fragmented thoughts and repetitive phrasing. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as repetitive transitions like 'Furthermore' and 'Another essential part'. Referencing is often unclear, with pronoun confusion and broken sentence structures that obscure the logical flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack internal cohesion, consisting of disjointed phrases, false starts, and self-corrections (for example, 'One positi The m...'). Overall, information and ideas are not arranged coherently, making the response difficult to follow from beginning to end.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and strained by numerous errors in word form, spelling, and word choice. The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'luxurious lifstyl', 'occupations', and 'economical activities', but these are marred by frequent spelling mistakes (e.g., 'imprestna', 'suta sut', 'esey', 'diffectical') and inappropriate collocations. Word choice errors and spelling slips occur throughout the text, often impeding communication and forcing the reader to guess the intended meaning. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and repetitive, reflecting basic control that struggles to convey precise ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting predominantly of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. Errors are frequent across multiple areas, including verb forms, tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and missing articles. Examples of structural breakdowns include 'th.e number of people continuing their education after school has increase' and 'As a rest as a result high income as easiter salaries easier their family responsibility'. Punctuation is largely neglected, with run-on sentences and erratic capitalization. These frequent errors distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader throughout the response.

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