Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The debate is on that in some countries many individuals have showing great interest in searching about their households and the cmethods of contruction of their houses. The main objective for finding the history of their home is their wide interst in buildings or getting knowledge about their houses. They get information from their ancestors very easily.

The most of the individuals have great interest in finding the history of their houses. For instance my house wasthe house of indians when my ancestors came in their separate country they choose that home so that by watching our house with many antique things got me in searching the history of houses. So that by having knowledge of our house help us to communicate with others when they ask me for my house buiolding.

The gettiong information of my house is very easy by my grandparents like as they only know the whole history and aspects of our house. For example I mostly ask to my grandmother how our house build and why we choose this house. She told with many adventourous stories about thjis when our country got independence. So by our beautiful grand parents we get a lot of informantion when we search for anything about our house.

To conclude my all discussion I would like to tell you about the bviews of some people who are interested in finding the history of their house so they easily take knowledge from their ancestors and the reason for getting knowledge of their house is spome people want to know all the history so they ask.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

Your response addresses the task only partially. While you attempt to cover both parts of the prompt regarding the reasons for researching building history and how people can research this, your ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, you mention that people are interested because of a wide interest in buildings, but this point lacks sufficient extension or specific explanation. Furthermore, your attempt to explain how people research this is restricted to asking grandparents and relying on personal anecdotes, such as when you state, 'house wasthe house of indians when my ancestors came in their separate country'. To reach a higher level, you need to fully develop your ideas with broader examples that go beyond personal family history, exploring public archives, historical records, and community research methods while maintaining a clear and consistent position throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organization present in your writing, with a clear introduction and conclusion, but the essay lacks a clear overall progression. Your ideas are connected in a repetitive and mechanical way, making the flow of the text somewhat difficult to follow. For example, you repeatedly rely on simplistic introductory phrases like 'The most of the individuals have great interest' and 'The gettiong information of my house is very easy'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical links between sentences are frequently faulty or unclear. Pronoun referencing is also weak at times, such as when it is unclear what 'this' refers to in phrases like 'why we choose this house. She told with many adventourous stories about thjis'. To improve your coherence and cohesion, you should employ a wider range of logical connectors naturally and ensure each paragraph has a distinct, well-managed central topic that progresses smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. You attempt some less common words, but these attempts are accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of these lexical issues include 'cmethods of contruction', 'house wasthe', 'buiolding', 'gettiong', 'adventourous', and 'bviews'. These mistakes show a lack of control over word forms and spelling. To achieve a higher band score, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary with greater precision and naturalness, ensuring that less common lexical items are spelled correctly and collocate appropriately within the context of discussing historical research and architectural heritage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your writing displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and errors are frequent throughout the text. While you attempt some complex sentence forms, they are often faulty and prone to structural breakdowns. For instance, your opening sentence contains significant structural confusion: 'The debate is on that in some countries many individuals have showing great interest in searching about their households and the cmethods of contruction of their houses.' You also demonstrate frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions within grammatical patterns, such as 'how our house build and why we choose this house'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing periods and run-on sentences that strain the reader. To improve your grammatical range and accuracy, you should focus on constructing reliable simple sentences before attempting complex clauses, paying close attention to verb forms, auxiliary verbs, and accurate punctuation.

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