Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years, several nations increasingly people are becoming fascinated by finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

I will discuss what are the reasons for this and how can people research this and provide an relevant example to this essay.

Firstly, majority of the teenagers are now shows keen interested to know about the historical building which is designed by late emperors.This kind of construction are very passionate in terms of ventilation, spacious rooms,to view the village people well being society markets.etc For example - In Hyderabad state Golconda is constructed such a way to with beautiful features where it is protected from enemies during the wars and there are several places to hide and with beautiful fountains.

On the other hand,the reason for this research is to bring the value and truths of the olden buildings and to raise the popularity in public views and gives support to the tourism spots etc.This points will definitely will attractions to the visitors.

In Addition,the research will be done by archeology department and some research teams will the support of some tools etc.

For Instance,In India the Golden temple is completely build with gold which gives very special attraction to the people.This temple will plays a crucial role in the state and enchances the state income with the viewers.Now,the some corporate companies are taking lead to take care and develop the in and out and also look around the temple with out any damaging snd collateral damage.

In conclusion,this are reasons for the people are doing research on ancient buildings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to address both questions, and the examples of Golconda and the Golden Temple show an effort to make the discussion concrete. However, the reasons are not clearly explained: the opening body paragraph focuses on teenagers’ interest in historic buildings, while the next mentions popularity and tourism without showing why residents want to investigate their own homes. The research methods are especially limited; saying that an archaeology department and research teams use “some tools” does not explain what an individual can do. The Golden Temple example concerns a famous religious site rather than researching the history of one’s home, so its relevance is unclear. Develop distinct reasons and practical methods, such as checking property records, archives, old maps, or interviewing previous residents.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the intended structure visible. However, the progression between ideas is difficult to follow. “On the other hand” suggests a contrast, but the paragraph continues with another reason, and “In Addition” introduces research without a clear connection to the preceding point. The examples also shift from private homes to Golconda and the Golden Temple, weakening the line of discussion. Some references, such as “This points” and “This temple,” do not clearly connect to a specific claim. Organise the essay around the two task questions, with one paragraph for reasons and another for practical research methods, and use linking phrases only when their relationship is accurate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “historical building,” “tourism,” “research teams,” and “collateral damage,” which gives the response a basic range relevant to the subject. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, and several combinations make the intended meaning hard to understand: “keen interested,” “raise the popularity in public views,” and “will attractions to the visitors.” There are also word-form and spelling problems, including “archeology,” “enchances,” and “build with gold.” Aim for more precise phrases and check collocations and word forms. For example, describe why residents investigate a property as “preserving heritage” or “understanding its architectural history,” and name specific sources such as “property records” and “local archives.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use both simple and longer sentence forms, including the example beginning “For example” and the sentence about companies caring for the temple. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “majority of the teenagers are now shows,” “This kind of construction are,” and “This temple will plays,” where subject–verb agreement and verb forms are faulty. Articles and sentence construction also need attention, as in “provide an relevant example” and “the reason for this research is to bring the value and truths.” Punctuation and spacing around sentence boundaries are inconsistent. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement, articles, and verb forms in each sentence.

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