Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the modern era everyone is intersted in knowing the backgroud of each discovery, things and news.Although in some country a lot of people are showing their interest in finding the history of residential structure.In fact it is due dramatic change in making in field. Although in reacent centuries people live single room and trend has change to multistory building and lagre houses.

Firstly, the interest would be due to dramatic changes in making the houses in we they live, usually in past centuries peoples does not make muitistory building for living, but in current century in is very common.Secondly i can be due to that it leave bad effect to environments, the product which are use in building house are cement, sand, steel, course aggregate and briks and they are made from natural resourses such rocks and mud, unless now a day these are the major couse of global warming as we use wide range of chemical in its.Futhermore it interest would be due to multiple design which are more attractive and decent such as white house building ,Iran supreme leader house and many others.

In this world of electronic people can find the background of even things by google, websites, and other electronic means even for building. If yhe people who does not use social media they can find it by books and magzines.

In Conclusion i world say that the interest of finding history of building is due, modern design, flexile and effcients building and it cause global problem and can be shorages to construction material in future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to address both questions: you suggest that changing building styles and environmental concerns motivate interest, and you mention Google, websites, books and magazines as research methods. However, the reasons are not consistently explained or clearly connected to learning about a particular home’s history. The discussion of construction materials and global warming, for example, shifts towards the environmental impact of building rather than explaining why residents investigate their own buildings. The research section is especially brief and gives no detail about how these sources could reveal a building’s past. The conclusion introduces flexibility, efficiency and shortages without developing them earlier. To strengthen the response, explain a few relevant reasons and show specifically how people might investigate a property’s age, former occupants or records.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure, with an introduction, a paragraph beginning “Firstly,” a separate paragraph about research, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Secondly” and “Furthermore” also signal that you are adding points. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several ideas are placed together without clear links. The paragraph about reasons moves from building styles to environmental effects and then to examples of prominent residences, without explaining how these points relate to the question. Some linking is mechanical or inaccurate, and the conclusion does not clearly summarise the main points developed in the essay. Use one focused paragraph for reasons and another for research, and connect each supporting detail explicitly to its main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “residential structure,” “multistory building,” “natural resources,” “global warming” and “construction material.” These choices show an effort to discuss buildings and their wider context. However, the range is limited and many spelling errors or imprecise expressions make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “dramatic change in making,” “course aggregate” and “flexile and effcients building.” Some phrases are also unnatural for the intended meaning; for instance, “finding the history of residential structure” would be clearer as investigating a home’s history. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as property records, previous owners and architectural features would help you explain the topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You try to use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “Although” and a conditional structure with “unless.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the intended meaning unclear. Examples include “people live single room,” “peoples does not make,” and “the product which are use,” where articles, plurals, agreement and verb forms are not controlled. Some sentences also lack clear grammatical connections, as in “In fact it is due dramatic change in making in field.” Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly where sentences run together. Build accuracy first with clear subject–verb–object sentences, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, tense, articles and sentence boundaries.

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