Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In some countries, several people are interested in finding something new. They want to explore new things. In this modern era, people are much smarter than era that's the reason behind people are getting more curious about searching something different and they want to collect knowledge as well.

Firstly, Nowadays more and more people are becoming more and more interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. This is because people are more curious now and they want to find out every little details about their house or building, through researches they find out the histories and sometimes they find it enjoyable. Beside that I think finding information about their own residence is very important for their privacy and safety. The more people will get curious the more information they will able to connect. They get to know about unknown histories.

Secondly, I believe finding out something new or exploring something is a good thing but sometimes it also has risks. The extreme curisity may fall people in danger. Its often very harmful to our society and family too. We should acquire knowledge but we must remember about how are achieving those knowledge. we should take care about that nobody get harm through our researches.

In conclusion, I'd like to talk about people who are curious and want to find out something important I really appreciate them because this is necessary to insure about their safety. But sometimes it can be dangerous. So, people should be aware about everything.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response recognises the topic and gives a possible reason—curiosity and wanting to learn about one’s home—but it does not adequately answer both questions. The reasons remain general, and the second question, how people can research a building’s history, is not explained: “through researches” does not identify practical sources or methods. The discussion of risks and safety takes up space without clearly showing how these relate to researching a home’s history. The conclusion repeats the safety point rather than drawing together developed answers. The response is also 241 words, below the required 250; the 15 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, address each question directly and support the points with specific examples, such as property records, archives, or conversations with previous owners.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a recognisable paragraph structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is weak because the second body paragraph shifts to the dangers of curiosity rather than developing how people can investigate a building’s past. Several ideas are repeated, including curiosity, finding something new, and safety, without clear links between them. Connectors such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” are used mechanically and do not always signal a relevant step in the argument. For clearer progression, organise the body around the two task questions, use each paragraph to develop one answer, and make references between sentences more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “history,” “residence,” “privacy,” “safety,” and “researches,” so the general subject is usually understandable. It also attempts some less common expressions, such as “extreme curiosity” and “acquire knowledge.” However, vocabulary is repetitive: “curious,” “find out,” and “something new” recur without adding precision. Some word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, including “every little details,” “the histories,” and “insure about their safety.” The misspelling “curisity” also reduces accuracy. More precise terms for research methods and historical information would help answer the prompt more effectively. For example, use “property records,” “local archives,” or “previous owners” rather than relying on general references to finding information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple sentences and longer structures, including a conditional comparison in “The more people will get curious the more information they will able to connect.” This shows some effort to vary sentence forms, and the main message is generally recoverable. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur across the response. Examples include “the reason behind people are getting more curious,” “they will able to connect,” and “We should acquire knowledge … how are achieving those knowledge.” There are also problems with agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation, as in “every little details” and the comma splice in the opening paragraph. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate clause construction and check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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