Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this?

How can people research this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

some contries have strong history of their house or building in which they are living and most of them are intersted to find out the history of it.

For example, i live in Pakistan which has also strong history about wars etc.

Like, 76 years ago, Paskitan was being separted from India by the good effort of our leader Qaid e Azam Muhammad Ali Jinah.

After separation, most of hindu families left Pakistan and moved to India. and Muslims leave India and traveled to Pakistan along with all assets by trains and other convence. Our Province Punjab have very strong history. Punjab have Gurdawara which was for Sikhs and Pakistan Goverment did not demolish it. Now they can travel thier Gurdawara as a visiting point.

Punjab has 'Kawera' which is second bigest salt mine in ghe word. This salt mine was discoved by the help of horses.

During a war, a king stayed at that point for rest.

The horses start liping the stones of salt mine.

After that, it was dicoverd that there is a Salt mine.

After more research and Discoveries, it was officialy announced that 'Kawera' is the 2nd biggest Salt mine in the world.

i live in Qadirabad, which is a small part of district Mandi Bahauddin.

My district also have a strong histroy about wars.

My district is located between the District Hafizabad and Jehlam. My district have River Channab. My District also have large number of visiting points which are very enjoyable for familes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response gives several specific details about Pakistan, Punjab, and the writer’s district, so it does provide relevant material about local history. However, it does not adequately answer either question. The reasons people want to learn about their homes’ histories are not explained, and the research methods requested in the task are absent. Most of the response instead recounts national and regional history, including migration after Partition and the salt mine’s discovery; these examples do not establish why residents investigate their own buildings. To improve, address both questions directly: explain motivations such as curiosity, family heritage, or renovation, then describe practical sources such as archives, land records, previous owners, and local historians.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic sequencing, with the response moving from Pakistan’s history to Punjab and then to the writer’s district. Time markers such as “After separation” and “After that” also help show order in the account of the salt mine. However, the response is not organised around the two questions, and the many short statements about different places and events do not build a clear overall argument. Paragraphing is absent, while repeated openings such as “My district” and “Punjab have” make the progression feel list-like. Group the response into paragraphs for reasons and research methods, and use clear topic sentences and references to connect each example to the point being made.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “history,” “separation,” “visiting point,” and “salt mine,” and the reader can generally identify the places and events being discussed. There are also attempts at more specific terms, such as “Province” and “assets.” However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make reading difficult, for example “contries,” “intersted,” “separted,” and “convence.” Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, including “strong history” and “travel thier Gurdawara as a visiting point.” Build a more accurate range for this topic, such as “historical background,” “heritage,” “property records,” and “local archives,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing relies mainly on simple sentences, with a few attempts to link events using “which,” “after,” and “by.” Meaning is often recoverable, but errors in sentence structure and basic grammar occur throughout. For example, “Punjab have” and “My district also have” show subject–verb agreement problems, while “most of hindu families left Pakistan” has an unclear article and plural construction. The sentence beginning “Like, 76 years ago” is also not a complete, well-integrated sentence, and punctuation around sentence openings and conjunctions is inconsistent. Practise accurate simple clauses first, then combine them with controlled complex structures, checking agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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