Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

From the begining of the civilisation, people have to work for their livelihood, which is start with food and it continue with treatment, living,education and more. There are number of persons who works for a long time and for this reason they can manage short time for their personal time because they want to achieve their goal very quickly and another cause is getting extra work from the authority. This eassy will explain the reason behind this statement and also give opinion about this situation.

One key reason why a lot of people working for long time is that , they want to fullfill their aim within a short time without knowing the consequences about it. For instance, they spend extra time in their organization after office hours. As a consequence, they stays a longer time in the company.

Another crucial point is that, there are some owner of the company give a lot of pressure to their employee. They give extra work to them, instead of hiring another employee. For example, for math teacher job position of a school the authority tries to give them classs for science and math subjects. As a result, they have waste their time on this.

However, in my opinoin this sitution has no positive sides at all. Because, when a person giving extra work load on them, they might be achieve their goals and can earn lot of money for them but can not give the more valuable thing towards them and for their loved one which is time.

In conclusion, people should be maintain their work and personal life properly. Working for long hours can not ideal things any person. People should take lesisure actitvities for themselves.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that the disadvantages outweigh any benefits, especially when you say the situation has “no positive sides at all” and explain that long hours take time away from loved ones. You also identify two relevant causes: personal ambition and pressure from employers. However, the task asks you to assess advantages and disadvantages, while much of the response explains why people work long hours rather than developing the effects on both sides. The possible benefit of earning more money or reaching goals is mentioned only briefly and then dismissed, with little explanation or example. Develop the comparison more fully and support your position with a specific consequence or example for each side.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two paragraphs about causes, a paragraph stating your view, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “For instance,” “As a consequence,” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. However, the progression is not always focused on the question: the first two body paragraphs discuss causes, while the advantages and disadvantages are not organised as a clear comparison. Some links are also mechanical or unclear, such as “Because” beginning a sentence after your opinion, and “As a result” does not clearly explain the example about teachers. Make each paragraph develop one aspect of the evaluation and use references and linking phrases that show precisely how each point supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “livelihood,” “consequences,” “pressure,” “employee,” and “work load,” and the reader can generally understand your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning less clear. For example, “fullfill their aim” and “give a lot of pressure” are not natural expressions, while “they have waste their time on this” is vague. Spelling errors such as “begining,” “eassy,” and “lesisure” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing work and wellbeing, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer natural combinations such as “achieve their goals” and “put pressure on employees.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “which,” and “when,” so there is some variety. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction can make the reader pause. Examples include “people have to work … which is start,” “a lot of people working,” and “they stays a longer time.” The sentence beginning “Because, when a person giving extra work load…” is also incomplete and difficult to follow. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and correctly conjugated verb, and check singular/plural agreement. For example, “Some employers put pressure on their employees” is clearer and grammatically controlled.

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