Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In 21st century, As you know, Lots of technologies invented which can work easier for people. People using too much mobile phones and computer, They neglect the physical activities for better physical health.

I am agree with this statement, Many people work long hours and do not the give time to leisure activities. For example, a corporate employee daily life start at 8:00 AM in the morning and he spent 8 hours in company on chair with computer. Then he left from company at 6:00 PM evening after that he spent some time with family. On basis of this schedule you can see that he does not have enough time for leisure activities. But he can do if company arrange these activities in company with other corporate employee. Company can do this on weekend once in a month and influence the employee with incentives. On the other sides, Which people already working in skill jobs they don't need any physical activities. They need just good time which can spend with families for leisure activities. But sometime they also does not have enough time to do the leisure activities. Because they already working hard and perfer to relax the body at home. On weekend, They do not want to go outside with family becuase they want just relax at home. Most of the people have common issue only they does not have time to do leisure activities. If people do not perform the leisure activities in daily life they will get frustrated everywhere at work place and home. They do not enjoy the good life with family and also they will mentally upset after some years.

On the other side, If will talk about the advantages for this situtaion. People can focus on work properly and they can utilized the leisure activities time in other work. As you know, This is the fast pacing world and everyone stuck in competition. Everyone want to earning too much for family and children. So they can utilized this time to do another jobs for earning. According to me, If they do not want to enjoy the leisure activities on daily life atleast they can do on weekend or once in a month.

In the conculsion, Many people work long hours and leaving very little time for leisure activities have both sides. But, For better health leisure activities is mandatory for everyone. Especially for the married people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the impact of long working hours on leisure time. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you provide a clear position that the situation is disadvantageous, the arguments regarding the 'advantages' are somewhat underdeveloped and contradictory. You touch upon the idea of working more to earn more, but the connection to the prompt's core question—whether the situation has more advantages or disadvantages—could be more explicitly stated. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported argument that directly answers the 'more advantages or disadvantages' question.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'On the other side' and 'As you know'. Some transitions between sentences are abrupt, making the flow feel disjointed. For example, the shift from discussing corporate employees to those in 'skill jobs' lacks a clear logical bridge. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'work easier' or 'good time', which limits the sophistication of your argument. There are also some issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'perfer to relax the body' and 'mentally upset'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to work-life balance, such as 'professional burnout', 'sedentary lifestyle', or 'financial stability', and focus on using these terms in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone want to earning'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'they already working'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices and capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be a great starting point for improvement.

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