Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This very important point to discuss on it in the world of technology that large proportion of public utilize their hours working long rather than leaving less time for other activities to do in free times.

This situation has more disadvantages than the advantages.

The advantages are improvement in financial situation as well as become sufficient to improve their lifestyle. However this also have disadvantages such as health problems, mood swing problems.

to start up with the advantages, in the world humans are making money to fulfill their requirements. The main reason people doing longer shifts is to balanced their life financially. and to improve their living standards. For instance, it is noticed that some people are nowadays suffering from a hunger the important reason for that is they do not have sufficient money to fulfil need of eating food. however the other argument is that some want to look stylish want to wear brands and they are eagar to earn money to showoff in front of public.

However, taking into consideration the disadvantages. working longer led to lack of proper sleep which become a cause of many health related issues. For instance it is seen that working longer hours individuals not taking the proper sleep faced more health problems which results in two main problems mood swings as well as hospital bills day by day , family issues due to busy schedule seen that conflicts happening between family due to work load.

Overall disadvantages overweigh the advantages

In Conclusion money is important in life but not more than relationships and happiness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages, and it maintains a clear position that the disadvantages outweigh the benefits. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding 'hunger' as a reason for working long hours is not well-linked to the context of modern professional life, and the explanation of 'mood swings' is quite brief. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more logical analysis and specific, realistic examples. While the task is addressed, the depth of the argument is limited, which keeps the score at a mid-level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'to start up with' and 'however the other argument is that' are used, but the transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'it is seen that working longer hours individuals not taking the proper sleep faced more health problems'. Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider variety of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic terms like 'important', 'problems', and 'money'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'mood swing problems' (instead of 'mood swings') and 'become sufficient to improve their lifestyle'. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the phrasing is often unnatural. To improve, focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and using more sophisticated synonyms to express your ideas more clearly and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently omit articles (e.g., 'suffering from a hunger') and struggle with subject-verb agreement and sentence fragments (e.g., 'This very important point to discuss...'). There are also punctuation errors, such as missing commas and incorrect capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the text hinders the overall quality. You should focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb.

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