Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.
Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Phenomenal,People are faced many type of challenge in life like works and personal related and his are not spending time of leisure activities.While are most impotant in life how to manage work and personal life or leisure activities there are many views.This essay will discuss both views but one of superiority behalf of drawback outweigh views.
On the one hand,People taken in working long hours then very little time for leisure activies there are many detrimental views.However,Meny people beliieve them had work and more long hours working in company they are got more salary and save money of financial.Although,they can improve spend time new technology and skills improve during more working long hours in company.For example,On of popular MNC company name is TCS they should a provide benefits flexible time with whole employess that's way manage work life balance.
On the other hand,whenever people lack of spend time some leisure activities and long working hours every day that are strongly optimistic prespective with people life.Therefore,Working hours take long then people are insufficient sleeping then increases stress,anxiety,headaches and depression.Furthermore,There are must priorities in life proper manage work life balance whole humans life.Hance,In our life would be important it is leisure activities they are balance our healthy life style that is beneficial in our life.For instance, On of madical article in newspaper there are must priority in life proper spend time family and friends anther take every day do leisure activities.
In conclusion,Although must impotant in life how to manage work life of balance and take leisure activities.Moreover,Sleeping it is must important in life because of mainten healthy life avery day.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of working long hours. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout the response. While the introduction mentions that drawbacks outweigh the benefits, the body paragraphs lack a cohesive argument to support this stance. Some ideas, such as the mention of TCS, are under-developed and do not clearly link back to the main argument. The conclusion is also somewhat disconnected from the body, failing to synthesize the points effectively. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly supports your overall position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion' are used, they are often followed by sentences that do not logically follow the previous point. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. The use of linking words is often mechanical rather than natural. Improving the connection between sentences within paragraphs would significantly enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'superiority behalf of drawback' and 'madical article,' which hinder clarity. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is little evidence of less common lexical items or idiomatic expressions. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to work-life balance and health.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'People are faced many type of challenge'), sentence structure, and punctuation. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are almost always inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex grammatical forms. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses is essential.
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