Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In the modern period a lot of people have to work for longer period of time, which results in having insufficient time for there hobbies, families and other activities. There are many pros such as learning new things, staying ahead in the competitions, and earing a good amount of money. But it also come with a lot a cons like, improper sleep, a disbalances between personal and private life, lack of creativity, and health issues.

Firstly, There are many benefits for this situation, when a person spends an extended amount of his time while working he is more often to learn new things in his life. He will be able to get more information and a much better understanding of new technologies, new idea, and the recent trend going on in the market. He may have a upper hand in the competition, as he has more idea, and knowledge about the modern scenario. Many employees who work for over time also have the privilege to earn a higher amount of money as a reward for their hard work. For instance, My friend was working as an "Operation analyst" at Ikea, an he was rewarded a bonus after every month for the extra hours he worked for the firm, and eventually he was promoted.

Secondly, there are lot of drawbacks when you keep on working, and not paying attention to your health and personal life. As an adult a sleep of 8 hours must be completed to have a healthier life-cycle. The sleep is affected because of working for longer hours. Addition to that, individuals does not get time to follow their hobbies, and enjoy the other outdoor activities. While a lot of person works during the weekdays and weekends, which creates a disbalances toward their personal life. As one cannot give enough time to there kids, wife and parents. For example, according to a recent study the person that works during the night time, and does not get enough sleep, may cause a lot of health issues in the future.

In conclusion, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. As working for long hours helps the career to grow faster, but create a lot of problems in the log run.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the task, providing both advantages and disadvantages before clearly stating a position in the conclusion. The ideas are relevant, such as career progression and financial rewards versus health and work-life balance. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, the example of the friend at Ikea is a good attempt at support, but the explanation of the disadvantages could be more nuanced. The position is clear throughout, though the essay would benefit from more sophisticated analysis to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Addition to that' (should be 'In addition to that'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, for example, 'the person that works' is a bit clunky. Overall, the progression of ideas is coherent, but the management of cohesive devices could be more flexible and natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'operation analyst', 'privilege', and 'modern scenario'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'disbalances' (imbalance), 'earning a good amount' (earning a significant salary), and 'a upper hand' (an upper hand). These errors do not impede communication, but they demonstrate a limited range of sophisticated vocabulary, keeping the score in the mid-range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the writer attempts complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('a sleep of 8 hours'), subject-verb agreement ('individuals does not get time'), and pluralization ('a lot of person'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas appearing in several places. While these errors rarely impede the overall meaning, they are frequent enough to prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. More attention to basic grammatical accuracy is needed.

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