Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.
Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
in todays era, everyone compete with each other and that is way they working for more hours to achieve a good lifestyle. according to my phenomenon it have both positive and negative aspects that i will describe in next paragraphs.
the primary reason is people can earn more money with these long hours work as they can afford luxirous lifestyle and provide good education facilities to their offspring. moreover, they can get chance to organize trips and explore new destinations as well as if something happens then they can experience a good treatment opportunities in well known hospitals if they have enough money to spend on them.
on the other hand if people are always busy in work then it put negative effect on their mental and physical health both because if they are not paying attention to eating healthy food then may be they face some health related problems. additionally, spending a very little time with family can weaken your bond with each other and it also disrupt person's mental health and ability of staying calm in aggressive situations. hence, it also important to enjoy some outdoor activities with own children that they feel attached with their parents.
in conclusion, although money is important to meet with basic needs but greediness of more work can be distroy your real peace of mind that you cannot afford by working more hours.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages. However, the essay is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which limits the depth of development. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat brief and lack specific, concrete examples to fully support the arguments. The position is clear, but the overall development is constrained by the length. To improve, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations and specific illustrations to ensure you meet the word count and provide a more comprehensive analysis of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'moreover', 'on the other hand', and 'additionally' are used to link ideas. However, the flow is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between sentences could be smoother. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure would benefit from more sophisticated linking words to improve the logical progression of arguments. Paragraphing is present but could be more effectively utilized to separate distinct points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'luxurious lifestyle' and 'mental and physical health'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'luxirous' instead of 'luxurious' and 'distroy' instead of 'destroy'. Additionally, some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'according to my phenomenon' and 'meet with basic needs'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on accuracy in spelling and using more precise collocations to convey your meaning with greater sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('everyone compete', 'it have'), article usage, and sentence fragments ('as well as if something happens'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of your writing. Increasing your control over basic grammar and proofreading for common errors will significantly improve your score.
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