Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.
Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The growing trend of spending less time for leisure activities has brought both positive and negative consequences. While there are certain drawbacks associated with this development, I firmly believe that the advantages are far more significant than that of disadvantages.
On the one hand, there are valid concerns regarding the drawbacks of spending less time for leisure activities such as physical and mental fitness. This is primarily because playing sports during spare time helps the person to build their muscles and physical fitness. For instance, a survey was conducted by Oxford university, it was noted that the performance at Dell Company increased sharply once they started giving a break of an hour in between their working schedule.
On the other hand, a much stronger case can be made for the benefits of spending less time for the leisure activities. The main rationale behind this is focus; when a person takes break from the work, they break the flow in their performance at the workplace. To illustrate this, an experiment was conducted on professors in Delhi, the Delhi Public School had shortened the recess of an hour to just 15 minutes before the final exams, so the teachers can make a proper plan on teaching. Hence, students studied well and scored more marks then the projectile one.
In conclusion, while there are valid concerns that people may loose their physical fitness, I firmly believe that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks because of less distraction that leads to progress at the workplace.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The essay addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat inconsistent. While the argument regarding 'focus' is presented, the supporting example involving teachers in Delhi is confusing and lacks logical clarity, making it difficult to follow how it directly supports the claim about workplace productivity. The example regarding the Dell Company is also vague. To improve, ensure that your examples are clearly explained and directly linked to your main argument. The response covers all parts of the task, but the depth of analysis is limited, which prevents it from reaching a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' are used effectively to guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical, and the internal logic within the body paragraphs is occasionally strained due to the unclear examples provided. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence builds naturally upon the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There is an attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'rationale', 'consequences', and 'distraction'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'projectile one' which is used incorrectly in context, and 'loose' instead of 'lose'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and the essay relies on fairly common phrasing. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to incorporate more precise academic collocations and ensure that less common words are used with greater accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'less time for leisure activities' (should be 'less time for leisure' or 'fewer leisure activities') and 'the advantages are far more significant than that of disadvantages' (should be 'than those of'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some comma splices, particularly in the second paragraph. The frequency of these errors does not impede communication, but they do prevent the essay from reaching a higher band score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage.
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