Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people work very hard and also do extra shifts but they have very short time for their personal activities or any other activities which help them to make happier. Many people say, this situation have more advantage rather than disadvantage.

First of all, mostly people work long hours for their better future and their children's future. In this modern era, most of things very costly even basic needs which is very important for human survival, therefore people work hard take extra shifts for more money. For instance, people work long hours they make more money which is provide best home, good society and help them for their children learn knowledge in good institutes, moreover they will have good opportunities which help them to grow up financially and get a financial freedom.

Secondly, work long hours give people more knowledge about their field and they have more chance to grow and do some unexpected thing in this field, While this has some disadvantages. For example, people work long hours they have lack of time for their family or other activities which is very important for their health and strong family bonding. Furthermore, they don't feel fresh or relax because they work long hours and didn't much time for physical activities and those activities which is better for this mind because mind relaxation is most important to stay fit.

In conclusion, people have lot of advantages they live better life opens door for their better future and their kids future but also have some disadvantage which is harmful for their health and family bonding. So, if people stay fit and make strong bonding with family than make some time do for all things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of working long hours. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout the essay. While you mention that some people believe there are more advantages, you do not explicitly state your own stance until the conclusion, and even then, it remains somewhat balanced rather than taking a definitive position. The ideas are relevant, such as financial stability and career growth, but they are somewhat under-developed. To reach a higher band, ensure your position is clear from the introduction and provide more nuanced explanations for your arguments rather than listing them.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'those activities which is better for this mind'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the transitions could be smoother to improve the overall readability and coherence of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'financial freedom', 'survival', and 'bonding'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'make happier' instead of 'increase happiness' and 'do some unexpected thing' which is vague. You rely on somewhat repetitive phrasing. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations related to work-life balance and economic factors to demonstrate a wider and more flexible range of lexical items.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('this situation have', 'most of things very costly') and article usage. Some sentences are fragmented or lack necessary prepositions, which occasionally makes the meaning slightly difficult to follow. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. Increasing your control over basic grammar and ensuring subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score in this criterion.

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