Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.
Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this new era majority of individuals work more hours and give less time for other activities. According to me both have merits and demerits.
Firstly, many people spend time on work because they want to earn more money and also, they feel alone sometimes if they do Long time work. it has also some advantages such as it release their stress and depression, loneliness, anxiety. secondly, individual also stay away from bad society, and they will be more focused in life. also perfect in their profession. they will get more good opportunities in their life. moreover, they will be physically fit. for example, In India most of the individuals are doing long hour job and they also earn lot of money, and they are also physically fit.
On the other hand, there are some demerits of doing long hour job such as people will not give more time to their family and friends. Furthermore, most of the jobs are tough to do and need physical power so if they do that for long time it will affect their physical health as well. Moreover, individual will lost their in trust to play so of the games such as cricket, football, Basketball and more games too.
for example, now a days people are and taking in trust in outdoor games or some brain games because they are busy in their profession so it is not good for our upcoming youth.
In conclusion, most of the people doing long hour job and give less time to leisure activity both their advantage and disadvantage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of working long hours. However, the development of ideas is limited. For instance, the claim that working long hours 'releases stress and depression' is counter-intuitive and lacks logical explanation. The examples provided, such as the mention of India, are too brief and do not effectively support the arguments. The position is stated in the introduction but remains somewhat superficial throughout the essay. To reach a higher band, you need to provide more detailed explanations and more relevant, well-developed examples to support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'secondly', and 'moreover', they are sometimes used mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'According to me both have merits and demerits', where the antecedent for 'both' is not explicitly defined. The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarize the main points or restate your position clearly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely on simple phrases like 'long hour job' and 'do not give more time'. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'individual will lost their in trust to play', which makes the meaning difficult to grasp. You attempt to use some topic-related vocabulary, but the lack of precision and frequent errors in collocation limit your score. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using a wider variety of synonyms to avoid repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentences, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'most of the people doing long hour job'), articles, and sentence structure. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent capitalization and missing commas. These errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring that your verbs agree with your subjects before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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