Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's competitive world all the working professionals and people who are working are giving more time to the working long hours in their office and they are leaving very little time for the daily leisure activities in their life.

As per growing economy everyone who is working in today's world is more concentarted and running towards job where working long hours in the job will give you more advantage for earning, this will also helps us to develop new skills and sharper our barain beacuse of this long working hours we cant provide or allocate some time for leisure activites such as playing with the family and doing some other home stuff or any other personal activites and by working more hours advantages are also more like we can improve work communication with other colleagues and we can be helpfull for the company growth beacuse we are working more hours increase of productivity in the work and we can adjust our time for leisure activites in the following day.

There are more disadvantages for working long hours this will impact on our health and mental behaviour as we can see so many surveys who work more and who work in particular time we can see so many chnages in their behaviour and we need to give more leisure time without that time we cant spend our daily activites we need any sport at least weekly thrice and we need to adapt with out side environment, spenidng time with friends is also important by working long hours u amy feel dizzy,uncomfortable,lack of sleep which leads to illness.

I saw my own friend who is working long hours and leaving very little time for leisure activites where that leads him to sickness and after a age when he look back he can not see what he did in his age just the work.

so leaving leisure time for the activtes is so important and need to work regualr hours instaed of working long hours.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of working long hours. The writer outlines some positive aspects, such as career advancement, skill development, and increased productivity, as well as negative consequences like health issues and reduced personal time. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout the essay, and the ideas presented are often repetitive and under-developed, particularly in the overly long second paragraph that crams too many separate points together. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of thorough development and clear structural division places this performance in the Band 5 category.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays severe issues with structural organisation and coherence. The response is essentially broken down into massive, poorly controlled run-on sentences, especially in the second and third paragraphs, which feature stringy clauses linked by repetitive conjunctions like 'and' or 'where'. Paragraphing is neglected, with the second paragraph attempting to cover too many disparate ideas without appropriate separation. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and inaccurately, such as 'where that leads him' or 'so leaving leisure time', which disrupts the logical progression of ideas. Consequently, overall cohesion fails to meet the criteria for Band 6, meriting a Band 4.5 or 5.0, rounded to 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying heavily on everyday terms like 'working long hours', 'leisure activities', and 'advantages'. There are frequent word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'sharper our barain' (brain), 'home stuff', 'mental behaviour', and 'weekly thrice'. While the writer attempts to use some less common words like 'productivity' and 'communication', the high frequency of spelling and lexical errors ('concentarted', 'chnages', 'spenidng', 'regualr', 'instaed') occasionally strains the reader and restricts the lexical score to Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by very long, sprawling sentences that lack proper punctuation, resulting in run-on structures like the entire second paragraph, which consists of just two massive sentences. There is a very limited range of accurate complex structures, and attempts at subordination often lead to tangled syntax and fragments, such as 'so leaving leisure time for the activtes is so important and need to work regualr hours instaed of working long hours.' Frequent errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and basic punctuation significantly impede readability, placing the response firmly at Band 5.

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