Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In this era, there are different type of people who wants to work more than waste our time on leisure activities.in this situation there are to many pros and cons for this topic which I li would like to elaborate in the next paragraph.

To commence with, there are many advantages for Masses who want to work many hours instead of spent your time on leisure activities. First and foremost reason is living expences are hight day by day beacuse all the things like clothes, groseries prices are increcing day by day so this reasons some people want to did more hours than enjoy their life in 2026 research said, yougones want to spent their time to fous on work instead of spent their time on free activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response only partially addresses the prompt because it falls severely short of the word count requirement, containing only 128 words compared to the minimum of 250 words. Although the writer attempts to introduce the topic and touch upon the pros and cons of working long hours, the ideas remain extremely underdeveloped. The text mentions rising living expenses and cites a vague 2026 study regarding younger workers, but it fails to fully explore whether the situation has more advantages or disadvantages, which is the core demand of the task. Due to the severe under-length and lack of full development, the score is heavily penalised for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text demonstrates some basic organisation, attempting an introduction and an opening paragraph for the advantages. However, paragraphing is faulty, with the second paragraph running on and lacking a clear conclusion. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'day by day' and basic transition phrases like 'To commence with'. Referencing is also problematic, as seen in the pronoun shift from 'our time' to 'your time' within the same sentence. There is no clear overall progression of ideas across the text, placing it firmly in the lower bands for cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that strain the reader's understanding. Examples include 'expences' instead of expenses, 'hight' instead of high, 'beacuse' instead of because, 'groseries' instead of groceries, 'increcing' instead of increasing, 'did' instead of do, and 'yougones' instead of younger ones. These errors indicate a limited lexical range that is inadequate for sustained discourse, restricting the score to a band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There are frequent errors in verb forms, such as 'people who wants' instead of want, 'instead of spent your time' instead of spending your time, and 'want to did more hours' instead of work longer hours. Punctuation and capitalisation errors are also prevalent throughout the text, including missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and missing spaces after punctuation marks. These frequent errors impede communication and reflect poor grammatical control.

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