Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Numberable, human doing work for many hours, and not another doing activities. I totally agree with this statement, as individuals are not focused on health.This situation has more disadvantages rather than advantages.

To begin with, These days every human are busy most of the time, so they start daily life in his house. Firstly,every individual wants to do work in any sector ,but they can not focuse on your health ,as well as , started many issues about bad sitting plan .For example -long sitting plan creates obesity due tolong hours.Secondly , More .when people continous work on computer or laptop after that eyesight be come weak.

On the other hand,More individual physical fitness is very well as of yoga or the gym.Therefore, humans feel more energetic and can work long hours without any hesitation. Most of the people get obtain a balanced in daily routine after half they can standup on our seates or stratched own body . These habits is very fruitful.

In conclusion, lot of human have a different mindset. I think people should take rest after few hours ,as of this situation they feel more comfortable as well as relex.Individual not only feel relex but also more energetic.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the disadvantages of working long hours, such as health issues and eye strain, and briefly touches upon advantages. However, the position is slightly confused at the beginning with phrasing like "Numberable, human doing work for many hours," which obscures the central argument. Furthermore, the length requirement of 250 words has not been met, as the response contains only 202 words. This under-length impacts the full development of ideas, leading to a penalty under Task Achievement. While some relevant examples such as obesity and eye strain are provided, they remain under-developed due to the brevity of the text. Consequently, this performance aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is organized into paragraphs with basic introduction, body, and conclusion structures, yet overall progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and lack of logical connections. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as "To begin with," followed by disjointed sentences, and "On the other hand," which introduces a contradictory or confusing shift regarding physical fitness and yoga. Referencing is frequently unclear, notably in sentences like "started many issues about bad sitting plan" and "these habits is very fruitful," where the antecedent is ambiguous. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences is weak, preventing the response from achieving a higher score and placing it firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical errors that strain the reader's understanding. Phrases such as "Numberable, human doing work," "focuse on your health," and "eyesight be come weak" demonstrate a very limited range and poor control of collocation and word choice. There are also noticeable spelling and word form errors, such as "continous," "seates," "stratched," and "relex." Although the writer attempts some less common words like "energy" and "obesity," inaccuracies in context and formation prevent successful communication in several instances. This vocabulary profile corresponds to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed complex sentence attempts. There is a persistent lack of control over basic syntax, subject-verb agreement, and articles, as seen in "every human are busy," "humans feel more energetic," and "lot of human have a different mindset." Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also problematic, resulting in fragmented thoughts and clauses that impede comprehension. The majority of sentences contain major structural errors, matching the criteria for Band 4.0 where errors are frequent and often distort meaning.

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