Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Lots of people have very busy routine as they dont have enough time to take care of ourselves and give very little time to spend with family and firends because oh hactic routine and working for long hours can cause fatige and tired all the time because they have very small time for doing leisure activities like doing self care and other things

Many peoples love busy life as every one have different moods and like different patterns of like some like short working hours so in this way they get enough time to go for shopping ,doing some exercises like yoga that keeos them healthy and fit in contrast long working hours it has more disadvantages

I thought It has more disadvantages becuause you dont have enough time to sleep and cause brain damage Give less time to her partner so that relationship effects

you didnt enjoy life as others enjoy with their family and friends others

like if they dont attend famil gatherings because of busy scedule they become rude and didnt wants to meet you again

lack ofphysical outdoor activities the blood not circulates through out the body and cause heart diseases

long hours of sitting in office chairs can cause obesity as fatts may acchmulated in the body and causes serious issues from my point of view i tnought short nours are much better for our healthy life styles money doent matters but health can if you have good health you enjoy every moment of life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that long working hours have more disadvantages, and you include relevant consequences such as fatigue, reduced time with family, relationship problems, and possible health effects. The final point that health matters more than money also reinforces your position. However, the response only partly develops the task: several claims are listed rather than explained, and the opening discussion of people preferring different routines briefly distracts from the comparison. For example, the effects of missing family gatherings and sitting for long periods could be supported with a clearer explanation or a specific example. Keep your position consistent and organise two or three main disadvantages into developed points, with relevant support for each.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a recognisable overall direction: you introduce the issue, state that long hours have more disadvantages, and finish by favouring shorter hours. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough, and much of the response appears as one continuous sequence without clear paragraphing. The shift from “Many peoples love busy life” to “I thought It has more disadvantages” is abrupt, while the health, family, and relationship points are added with little linking or explanation. Some connectors, such as “in contrast,” are attempted, but the relationship between the ideas is not always clear. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and connect each point explicitly to the one before it.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “leisure activities,” “working for long hours,” “relationship,” and “heart diseases,” so the reader can identify the main subject and your concerns. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations, and spellings make parts difficult to understand, such as “busy routine,” “brain damage,” “blood not circulates,” and “fatts may acchmulated.” Repetition of “time,” “long hours,” and “cause” also limits precision. Aim to use more accurate phrases for the effects you describe, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain the consequences without relying on broad or unclear claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express several connected ideas and use some longer sentence forms, but control is weak and errors frequently make the message harder to follow. For example, “they dont have enough time to take care of ourselves” shifts from “they” to “ourselves,” and “the blood not circulates” has an incorrect verb construction. There are also problems with agreement and sentence boundaries in phrases such as “long hours of sitting … can cause obesity as fatts may acchmulated in the body and causes serious issues.” Most sentences run together without reliable punctuation, and the range of structures remains limited. Practise building complete sentences with one main idea, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and using full stops to separate points.

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