Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern advancement with technology we have witness over work budern suffer by many people around us. These long hours work schedule has varities of pros and cons with it. To justify it I will discuss more about disavantages of long hours work impacts on people's lives with resonable examples.

First of all, there are so many jobs are available by many companies around world, which works long hours and pays less than minimum wages. These job market target who do not have any relevent experience in amy kind of work. These works shifts works at least 12 hours to 18 hours per day. Furthermore, these jobs do not allows a person to do other activies during day time as they spends most of their time at job. Some time a person also lost their hobbies and activities which makes him happy. An example like security jobs are with long hours of shifts as well as they did not get any thing for rest. which makes them tired in evening and reduce their productivity.

Furthermore, long shifts can alter person thoughts and mental health. Some times they do not get proper wages as per their work schedule and hours they work extra. Moreover, they can easily get irritated by frequent questions asked by their family. They also souted on their loved ones. Day by day they lost their favourite hobbies and activities because long working hours and tiredness. Also long hours work can make a person life misrable. An example like Doctors who works long shifts at hospital can face these problems.

However, there are some advatages of long workshifts like finish work on time, complete some production before dealline. It also helps to reduce workload while shortage of staff. But we can not throw out how these long working hours affects a person private life.

In the end, I can say that long hours working may get some benefits to their employers.But long working hours can reduce their productivity and make their life unhappy. Therefore, Employers can take appropriate measures to reduce work burden of their employees.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the question and make your position clear: the disadvantages of long working hours outweigh the benefits. Relevant effects include reduced time for hobbies, tiredness, lower productivity and strain on family relationships, while the paragraph beginning “However” acknowledges benefits such as completing work and managing staff shortages. Some points are less fully developed than others: the security-work example is linked to fatigue, but the doctor example is only briefly mentioned, and the benefits are listed rather than explained. To strengthen the response, explain how each example demonstrates the impact on leisure and weigh the benefits against those personal costs more explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, two paragraphs focused on disadvantages, a paragraph acknowledging advantages, and a concluding position. Linking expressions such as “First of all,” “Furthermore,” and “However” help signal the direction of the argument. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “An example like security jobs” does not smoothly connect the example to the preceding point, and several ideas about lost hobbies and tiredness are repeated across the body paragraphs. Improve progression by grouping related effects together and using clearer references to show how each example supports the main claim. This would make the argument easier to follow without relying so heavily on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “productivity,” “mental health,” “workload,” and “shortage of staff,” and you attempt to express a range of effects on workers. However, the range and control are limited by repeated general wording such as “long hours,” “work,” and “activities,” as well as inaccurate word choices and collocations. Phrases such as “alter person thoughts,” “souted on their loved ones,” and “throw out” make some meanings difficult to interpret. Spelling errors, including “disavantages,” “dealline,” and “miserable,” also reduce precision. Build a more accurate set of topic-specific phrases and check spelling and collocation so your ideas are expressed clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “which,” “as,” and “because,” and the overall meaning is generally recoverable. However, control is inconsistent, particularly with subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals and sentence construction. Examples include “These long hours work schedule has,” “these jobs do not allows,” and “Doctors who works long shifts.” Some sentences are also incomplete or awkwardly joined, such as “An example like security jobs are with long hours of shifts … which makes them tired.” Use a reliable subject–verb check, and revise long sentences into complete clauses with clear punctuation. More accurate control of these structures would make the argument easier to read.

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