Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays people are into a very busy schedule that there are not even able to takeout time for themselves. whenever people has born they came with there dream and hobby. having a hobby is one of the most important thing in everyones life. I do agree with that is has more disadvantage because of there busy work time they do lack plenty of the new things

To begin with, indivuals has there own responsiblity and work to run there family with a great treatment in this people forgot to just spend out there time in exercise, hobbies and creativity because of this people do lack in leisure time. as per the reasearch that has been made by the scientists that people go throw there bad health for just working whole the day instead of physical activity and hobbies. Kinley is one the greatest emplooye and was certified in guiness record for working fully loyaly and gave his to full to take his company up at the retirement time he was rich enough buy something but was not able to take better health

furthermore, many people do not have hobby they just like to live there life whatever going on. this type of indivuals do takeout there time even in the working time for there hobbies, exercise, yoga and other activity. this is one of the most disgusting thing in every indivuals and i really preffer to give there more time in leisure activites instead of just working out with there busy schedule

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position, stating that long working hours have “more disadvantage,” and your points about reduced time for exercise, hobbies and health are relevant to the question. The example of Kinley also attempts to show a possible personal cost of prioritising work. However, the response only partially develops the comparison: it does not explain the advantages of working long hours or clearly show why the disadvantages outweigh them. Some claims, such as “people do lack in leisure time,” are repeated rather than supported with specific reasoning, and the Kinley example is difficult to follow. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of limited leisure in a clear chain of reasoning and briefly acknowledge the opposing benefits before reaffirming your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an introduction and paragraphs beginning “To begin with” and “furthermore.” These markers help signal that you are adding points, and the discussion generally stays on the topic of work and leisure. However, progression is difficult to follow because ideas within paragraphs are loosely connected, and several sentences combine multiple points without showing their relationship. For example, the paragraph about responsibilities moves quickly from family needs to hobbies, research, health and the Kinley example. Referencing such as “this type of individuals” is also unclear. Give each paragraph one main idea, develop it in a logical order, and use clear links between cause, example and result.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “responsibility,” “physical activity,” “retirement” and “leisure activities,” and you attempt to express ideas about health and personal interests. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “takeout time,” “gave his to full,” and “working out with there busy schedule.” Spelling errors, including “indivuals,” “responsiblity” and “reasearch,” are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the message. Aim to learn common topic phrases as complete units, such as “make time for leisure” and “maintain a healthy lifestyle,” and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to use both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur frequently: “people has born,” “individuals has,” and “people do lack” do not consistently follow standard patterns. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also problematic; the opening runs several ideas together, while “whenever” begins a sentence without a capital letter. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to understand. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, complete sentence structure, and capital letters and full stops.

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