Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to you in response to the advertisement for someone to teach your two children my language for a year. I saw the job opportunity online and I believe I would be suitable for role.

I would be able to teach your children very well, because I have tought more than fifty children my language in the past, which they understood it to the fullest. I am ready to welcome any challenge they might face while learning the language. I will also put them through on everything they need to know about the course.

Also, I can dedicate myself to watch over the kids and take good care of them while you are away. Maybe when you travel or go to work. So that you wont have to worry about leaving them behind.

The reason I am interested in this job is that, I would like to stay in Australia for a period of time. During this period, I can stay with your kids at your house and also teach them my language.

I woulbe be very grateful if I can get the job and I promise not to take the opportunity for granted. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.

yours faithfully,

Oluwaseun Bello.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain your teaching experience, offer childcare while the parents work or travel, and say you want to spend time in Australia. The claim that you have taught “more than fifty children” gives the suitability point useful support, and the letter’s purpose is clear throughout. However, some ideas are less fully developed than others. For example, “put them through on everything they need to know about the course” does not explain what your teaching would involve, and your reason for wanting the job is mainly that you wish to stay in Australia. Add a specific reason for teaching these children or a brief example of how you would help them learn.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: you introduce the application, discuss your suitability, describe additional help, explain your motivation, and close politely. Paragraphing supports this progression, and signposts such as “Also” and “The reason I am interested” make the main sections easy to follow. Some connections are less smooth or clear, however. “Maybe when you travel or go to work. So that you wont have to worry…” breaks one idea into fragments, while “During this period” repeats the time reference without adding much. Link these points in complete sentences and use pronouns or transitions more precisely. This would make the cohesion feel less mechanical and the progression more consistently fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main purpose, with relevant expressions such as “advertisement,” “job opportunity,” “take good care of them,” and “look forward to hearing from you.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, which can make parts of the letter less clear. “Put them through on everything” is not a natural way to describe teaching, and “understood it to the fullest” is awkward and unclear. There are also spelling errors in “tought,” “wont,” and “woulbe.” Choose more precise phrases for teaching and describe your experience in natural terms; careful proofreading would also improve accuracy and readability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and some longer structures, including the relative clause in “more than fifty children …, which they understood…” and the conditional idea about caring for the children while the parents are away. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors persist. In “which they understood it,” the relative clause has an unnecessary object pronoun; “Maybe when you travel or go to work” and “So that you wont have to worry” are sentence fragments. The conditional “if I can get the job” would be more appropriate as “if I could get the job,” and the comma after “is that” is unnecessary. Aim to connect dependent clauses to complete sentences and check verb forms and punctuation.

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